I decided to go with D, and I just launched into it. I'm hoping folks can tell me if things are pulling focus and interest. I"m worried there's too much texture in the tree, perhaps, and I need to do something a bit more substantial to the path he's standing on...
@aprilshin I decided to change the boy's facial expression a bit, and have him looking upward with a "sorta" grin... I think that was stronger than the "I'm lonely" vibe I think I was going for... Does that make things a bit clearer? Or at least less complicated?
@jon-anderson Thanks for the heads up Jon - I was thinking I needed to come up with something different than the current version of "OZ" so it has become a place holder at the moment until I can sort it out
@Chip-Valecek Thank you for the feedback and suggestion Chip - I played with that idea a bit but I'll go back to it and kick it around a bit more.
@holleywilliamson Thank you for sharing your opinion Holley - I never really considered that one for the cover but I see how it might give a better feel for the other illustrations in the book than my Dorothy drawing does - i will try a version with it as the cover and see - thanks again
@smceccarelli Thank you for letting me know if it is working better or not - I'm getting the feeling that i really need to put the breaks on and try different images for the cover. I was thinking of the idea of testing just today... that i could try out different covers over time - it looks like KDP makes it very easy to edit your books after they are published - i think i should make up several covers and put them here first on the forum - Thank you again for your help
Cute! I like the interesting angle in the third frame. What a fun idea to do it with your kiddo! One thing that stuck out to me was that the little kid has a pretty mature and masculine face. Some things you could try, make the eyes bigger and bring them down and closer together. Bring the ears down too and shrink them. Maybe aim for more of a button style nose and play with less defined eyebrows. Kids have pretty round faces, with big eyes. Another thing you can do is part the hair on the side for a more appealing look.
So wonderful Simona! love these..I think my preference is the more realistic boy as well.
There is an artist in Ontario...her name is Elly MacKay whose process involves cutting out her characters and setting them up in scenes to then photograph. Quite amazing.. you’d enjoy her work. (Theaterclouds.com)
@gary-wilkinson Thanks so much. I always appreciate your feedback and feel that I learn something valuable every time. Next time I have a free moment, I'll revisit the illustration and try making the changes you describe, just to make sure I understand and cement these tips in my brain for when I compose my next piece. Composition is an area that I'm working on improving.
I agree that making the cat interact with the travel icons makes sense and a more connected piece. I don't want the cat to be frustrated or angry, though--he's just happy doing his own thing.
Here are the changes so far...
@miriam I finished it and sent it in but I get what you mean! Thanks! I thought the little fish behind the whale would give it some more depth but I didn't take the colours into account. Something to think about next time
I wanted to see what it would look like with @juliepeelart's suggestion of moving the horizon line. I hope you don't mind that I did a quick edit & moved the horizon to the top 1/3 line on the page (which is still quite a bit lower than the original--so you might want to play around with it some more).
@gary-wilkinson I agree with all your points thoroughly. I had a bit of trouble with this piece and it seems to have just gotten away from me the more i painted! For now I'll stash it away i think and come back to it at a later date to try and fix it. I'll keep with me what i've learned from it and apply it to my future concepts, which i'm a bit more excited for (i was never super excited about this concept in the first place haha) Thank you very much for your words, your critique will be very helpful to me in the future i think!
Thank you all for your kindly advice, it is fun to have others eyes to see.
I think kind-a got a little fixated on aspects of technique, and if I'm honest, that tree image on conformed to flag was the impetus for the work (at least partly). @TwiggyT @Miriam @RHirsch @Sofie_designed Thank you