Hi, guys! I hope everyone it's safe and well. My city it's now in quarantine so i decided to take this time alone to get back to the basics As i'm a lone student i need some feedback on my work to know what i should be aware of. Today i took some of my time to make a looooong gestual drawing practice. I made a bunch of drawings but i'll post just some of them here. Anyway here goes!
(looks like i don't know how to post images here)
Hey! This is unfortunately going to be a short critique, because I have to admit...I couldn't read the story.
I struggled with how tiny the text is, and how difficult it can be to read cursive/handwritten fonts on-screen. My vision's not the best, so that's on me...
...but you also have to remember that your audience is NOT going to be skilled with reading handwritten fonts like this one. Depending on what the age range that you're targeting, you will need:
with more legible letterforms
with kerning (space between the letters) that makes sure that letterforms are not getting visually mixed up with each other.
With larger type, you may have to rethink where the type happens on each page, so it's not crowding the edge of the layout.
I hope this helps you think about your story a little more! I'd be interested to hear what age range you're targeting this book at. I feel that forum members will likely have much more targeted advice if they knew who you were imagining your readers will be.
THE FIST is about a guy who punches stuff real good. His wife is a spaceship. They’re on the run from the EVIL Space Army, but stop along the way to fight for money.
It’s a big, action-packed, weird, silly, four-color, fun, dumb, love-letter to all the comics, cartoons and video games that formed my brain as a kid.
It’s a book I've been working on and off between projects for four years. I "write", illustrate, color, and publish it all on my own. I say "write" because it's more of a freeform kind of thing. I use a loose outline, but make up a chunk of it as I go.
CHECK IT OUT HERE
CHECK IT OUT HERE
@Coreyartus Thank you so much! Your post is super encouraging, I'm really glad you liked it and that it reads as it does for you. Making art can really put you in a weird place sometimes where you can't see things as other people do anymore, so I really appreciate the feedback here.
I hadn't thought of doing an illustrated version of the play to be honest, but it might be a fun idea!
As for text, yes, I would like to put at least a title on, but haven't quite worked my way around to that piece yet.
Thanks again for taking the time to leave the feedback!
@Lee-White Much appreciate the encouraging comment. I hear what you're saying about those shadows in front of the house. They've been bugging me for a while now, and I was never quite sure why. You solved the riddle for me! I re-did the lawn with softer shadows coming from the bottom right. Looks much better, me thinks!