Hello! Your work is really skillful!
I also came from a concept artist type background, and when I transitioned to kidlit and had to figure out what my own style is, I had the exact same feeling. I started trying to figure out what my style is in October and I am just now starting to feel like I might be on to something.
I agree with others, that your work would go better to an older age range so middle grade or graphic novels could be a good fit. I think the pen and ink feels more organic and in line with more "book" rather than games or animation.
The images that I feel are pulling you in a different direction are 5,8,9,11,12,13 because they are don't use the loose line work drawing you have in the other ones.
There is a class here on finding your style. It has you put together a "dream portfolio" I found it super helpful to help me sort out what I am missing in my own work and along with researching books in the age and style that I am interested in help me have a clearer direction to go towards.
Hope that helps!
I think this is both interesting and has great variety in paneling! The images compliment the text to enhance the story very well.
For panel 1: We might want to see both characters. I didn't realize there were 2 people until panel 3, so it was a little bit disorienting (unless this is just a page out of a larger comic)
I have no idea how to show a door imploding LOL but you could always show it from the other POV if you feel like it's not working?
I personally treat the art for comics as full pages and if possible as spreads. That way I can make sure it is working compositionally as a whole, and not just each individual panel.
Just reading this now. I think the cover has improved a whole lot since the beginning and now it looks quite nice! The only thing I'd do is possibly move the type up a hair. It has had the tendency to be too low all throughout the process. One of my art professors told me, in relation to mattes in frames but I think it also applies to type placement, that the bottom of a matte should always be a little thicker than the other sides, because the eye wants more weight at the bottom. Make sense?