I decided to go with D, and I just launched into it. I'm hoping folks can tell me if things are pulling focus and interest. I"m worried there's too much texture in the tree, perhaps, and I need to do something a bit more substantial to the path he's standing on...
@aprilshin I decided to change the boy's facial expression a bit, and have him looking upward with a "sorta" grin... I think that was stronger than the "I'm lonely" vibe I think I was going for... Does that make things a bit clearer? Or at least less complicated?
@giorgiofeltrucci Hi. Your painting is very vector-esque but I don't completely think the lack of textures is necessarily the issue (although it can definitely help strengthen the piece) but my issue primarily regards the lack of storytelling.
It's just a curtain blowing in the wind in a very empty-looking desert. I think you can tell a story without using characters and let the landscape tell the story by itself, but the story here is rather mundane.
The dimensions of the portrait I also find somewhat limiting. I think the one thing that can improve this piece is by telling the audience (through objects in the portrait) what the significance of this setting is. What makes this place special? Why are we looking at the wind blowing through the curtain? Is the wind significant? Is the curtain significant? What is the significance of the house? What is the significance of the desert setting?
Essentially what makes the place the curtain is in special?
These are all pretty fantastic! Purely from a design perspective I LOVE #3, it's such an interesting perspective and it reminds me a bit of Talouse-Lautrec and some of his unique compositions. However, I think the design and perspective in #5 makes the White Witch look the most intimidating. First she is staring straight at the viewer, which is very confrontational and the POV is from a lower angle looking up at her which seems to imply she is above/greater than the viewer (which I'm assuming is the child shown in the other sketches). Love seeing your process here! Looking forward to seeing which you choose to develop.
@LauraA Thank you for your feedback and kind words Laura! I think you are right that fashion-in-illustration is really part of what i am wondering. This is something i've thought a lot about. When i've tried to drift toward the style you mention it seems really inauthentic to me.... not that the style is inauthentic just my dabbling in it is. I actually love the style that is in fashion right now but really feel like it does not belong to me in any way.
@NessIllustration Thank you for the clarification and kind words Ness!... i actually was googling "album style picture book"
@Heather-Boyd Thank you for the feedback and kind words Heather!! (i definitely kept the smoke as cut-out-ish to give me wiggle room elsewhere to not be too finicky...i actually spent quite a while making more realistic smoke but as is often the case when i spend a bunch of time redoing something.... it looked better before is started!)
@Asyas_illos Thank you Asya!!
@Only-The-Real-Survive You are right about the horizon line it is above the hammer..maybe right below the bottom brown ring on the growler. Your original question was asking how a tilted objects related to the horizon line - my sketch was just to show that the vanishing points do not have to hit the horizon and how to figure out where they might be in relation to it....
this book cannot be beat, maybe check it out...he has a second one too but this covers most of it - all of his books are so good!
@Adam-Thornton-0 Hi Adam. So sorry for the delayed response. Thanks so much for your message. Yes, I've read it! Found it really insightful. His attention to the textures is amazing. I'm still finding what tools work best for that. Getting there slowly.
I'm actually already reworking the focus on the background and the lighting at the moment so on the same wave length
Thanks for the boost!
@Katherine Thank you for the compliment on my work!! I'm so glad my post did not seem negative to you.. i almost deleted it after i wrote it because it seemed unhelpful and possibly damaging. I love Tom Waits - I listened to that NPR interview with Tom Waits 18 'ish years ago!
Great job! I love how your characters turned out. This was fun for me to see as I'm in the middle of this class right now! The class really is helpful and I feel more confident having a process to follow for character design. Thanks for sharing!
Aside from style issues, I just listened to the SCBWI conference and many of the editors/ADs said they weren't getting their postcards at the moment anyway because of the pandemic, so to send emails. Just a thought to add to the mix...
The wolf is really cute though! I don't think there's anything unprofessional about it at all! In fact, the animal pieces are my favorites in your portfolio. I think these could sell somewhere! Have you thought about a shop?
@Valerie-Light Thank you, Valerie. I also learn tremendously from this forum and all the works in progress people post. It’s such a helpful community and learning space!
Well, I think this is it for now. Thanks again for all the help everyone!