This sounds familiar. I think the SVS Holy Trinity has touched on this topic in the past. What I get from it is, that it takes a lifetime to become a master at something and to just keep churning out your art, that you will get there. Keep a positive outlook on this project so you don't get burned out and know that even if you slow down, that every little bit you do will get you one step closer to your goal(s). I say goal(s) because it seems as soon as we artists get to what we think of as our goal, we immediately see a new one on the horizon. Good luck. =)x
I decided to go with D, and I just launched into it. I'm hoping folks can tell me if things are pulling focus and interest. I"m worried there's too much texture in the tree, perhaps, and I need to do something a bit more substantial to the path he's standing on...
@aprilshin I decided to change the boy's facial expression a bit, and have him looking upward with a "sorta" grin... I think that was stronger than the "I'm lonely" vibe I think I was going for... Does that make things a bit clearer? Or at least less complicated?
@ashinmakes (I thought I posted this last night!)
It's very cute!
(And very similar to the one I was just working on--my nieces and nephews like to build little villages outside.)
I love the perspective of looking through the village!
(I thought about going that low, but then I raised the view a little higher.)
I think I would have had trouble with knowing that's a hand--though that should be easier once it's rendered more & you can see the fingers. Oh. It is the fingers.
(Ha. For the movie-quote lovers: "You are the brute squad." https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=qmJ2GVOEVFI)
I realize it's supposed to be an extreme perspective / foreshortening, but I'm not finding it quite believable. Maybe try working on a sketch of just the girl and draw her whole arm to see how the angle of the fingers would work. I'm thinking the top of the fingers should be angled towards her. Also, these are super-tiny toys! I guess they are like Polly Pocket dolls.
The size difference between the close mushroom house and the one by her face doesn't seem to be as big a difference to me as her fingers compared to her face. I'm not good with perspectives, though! I'm struggling with it on my piece as well.
It's also looking pretty busy--especially right around the girl's face, but values could help with that.
The tongue sticking out in concentration is a fun detail. I'm looking forward to seeing more of this--it's adorable!
I finished my first children's book! It was an interesting journey to say the least, but there is an immense feeling of accomplishment when you finish a book. I finished Cacti Octopi a few months ago, and after a little internal debate I decided to put it online for FREE.
Here is the link to my new website: https://www.tylerjhallstrom.com/
I would greatly apprecaite any feedback, comments, shares, thoughts, or general encouragement as far as this project goes.
Thanks for you time everyone!
P.s. - I also have a webcomic that I update every Friday (aka today). There are 30+ pages also available now! I'll be making a separate post for this later.
@jason-kilthau I really like the composition and elements in this piece - cool idea! The rendering also looks fine but I suggest to work on your colors a bit more. Now your local colors are very dominant and unless you intend to achieve a more "garish" look to it, they should be shifted to a cooler color temperature as the scene is mainly lit by the moon and sky. So that basically means, that the color of lit surfaces should shift towards "cool" (blueish in this case") and maybe it will enhance the feel of the forms when you shift the shadow towards a warmer color (does not work all the time, but is worth a try). E.g. do not only shift the value when the form turns towards the light surce but think how the light (cool/warm) affects the local color and then change the hue accordingly. This will hold the elements more together, giving the whole comp more consistency. A fast way to see what I mean is to apply a blue photo filter in PS over the whole piece. Hope this helps and keep up the good work. Happy painting!
@miriam Many thanks for your Feedback! I am glad to hear that you like this version as well. Sometimes it is not so easy to let go of an element. I felt that it was not essential for the "message" so it was somehow a small storytelling/design trade-off.
Yes, the tribe is wearing empty snail-shells as "helmets"
@jdrpictures Congratulations on finishing the course, and giving yourself a final project!
I am working on the same course, but I'm taking my time with it. Recently, I've been trying to improve my line work and learn how to use a brush pen.
@embla I like the background foliage of the two on the left side, (it looks very dense in the two on the right) but if it's supposed to be a flat, open landscape, you might want to change it so it looks more grassy instead. This looks like there are plenty of trees and shrubs, so if that's ok--it looks good.
I like the smaller rock in the middle of the water (in the lower left version). (In the other ones, I think it's a little distracting.)
For colors, I like the two on the left, and I think the upper left is my favorite. I like the light blues of the one on the upper left.
But if you are going for sunset, I like the one on the lower right--I'd just change the sky color a bit. I would start on the right side of the sky with the yellow in your palette, then moving to the left, add a little of the reddish/orange. Then have that fade to a lighter blue--like the light part on the tip of the blue at the bottom of your palette and give it a gradual fade from the light blue to darker blue (using the same blue paint color), so the darker blue is on the left side of the sky.
At sunset, if you have your back to the sun, you see a darker blue sky and if you look toward the sun, you see the sunset colors (often reds, pinks, &/or oranges) with light blue sky. (I've seen sunsets with a lot of pinks and purples, too--especially if there are a lot of clouds. So you can be very imaginative with it. But since you already have a pallet that's working, I'd stick with that.)
I like how the figure on the left (in the lower right version) has some color to the clothing on the side facing the sun. Maybe you could add that to the other figures as well.
Nice composition and a fun, peaceful image.
@c-davies Alas not all the people are content in the mushroom village. Sometimes I just start busting out laughing in the studio, I guess that means I'm in the right place. This might just be my submission for the contest.Chris
@embla Thanks so much so glad you like it. Oh you can't see it very well but there is a little stair case before his door by the curvy mushrooms. Once I do a full pencil in you will be able to see them better sorry!
@larry-whitler said in Mushroom village- critique please:
Very creative and original! I love the playfulness of your work. A child (and parent) would be enchanted turning the pages of a book illustrated by you. Love it!
Thanks!! I have fun creating it this way, so I’m glad it shows through the work. I do need to find a way to use this technique in a quicker fashion, so I’m planning on experimenting how to do that these next few weeks.
@sarah-luann Yes, that is perfect. I think, especially in illustrations, that there is an interesting way to approach this that you have demonstrated which is to use outlines some of the time but not all of the time. Great work, by the way.
@cjones You're not really doing anything wrong. The thing is that screens have a backlight, so everything is brighter because there is literally light shining through even the darkest areas. Ink on paper does not have the same benefit. You'll probably need to have a file with adjustments you'll use solely for printing. It'll look terrible on screen, but will produce a more accurate image when printed.
Many years ago I wrote a song about a dolphin and a girl. My partner and I recorded the song and then wrote a story for a children's radio show we used to do. The story is called "Aegir and Melina" (Aegir is the dolphin, Melina is the girl.)
Now, as we get older, we have decided to take that song and story and re-write it so that it works as a children's picture book. Anyway, here are the first two illustrations for the book.