Lusia and Sponge

Jonas Zavacky

Greetings

I took one of the thumbnails from the previous post and worked on it a bit more.

The picture is about Lusia and Sponge enjoying the time together/traveling together.

Something that is worth taking further here?

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Thank you for any input ^^

Laurel Aylesworth

@Jonas-Zavacky These are just dreamy and lovely. I don't know what the story is about, but I'm loving #1 and #5.

Ailantan

I really like #5, I feel most drawn to it. Number #2 have a nice road that feels like travel, but I do not like traveling towards sunset that much. Depends on what the story is about. Number #4 looks like nice rest in shadow, #6 like entering somewhere dangerous.

I love number 1 or number 5!

Jonas Zavacky

I guess I will go with the 5th one It is my favorite as well Thanks for feedback

Jonas Zavacky

Ok made some progress Linework + values. I feel like I can push it more with the plants and stuff, but I am afraid I will make a huge mess from that. So, for now, that is what I have... any comment before I move onto color?

Ailantan

I played with it a bit, how do you feel about this: I decreased the value of the tree on the left and increased one in the middle, so the contrast between light character and a dark tree is bigger. Also how about more diagonal grass embarkment, for increased interest? Btw you lineart is amazing, I love it, can't wait to see more

Jonas Zavacky

@Ailantan Thanks for suggestions. Yes adding more contrast between the character and the tree is probably needed. With the grass, I would like to keep it real low and passive, but It suggests me that it needs more interest so I will play with that! Thank you!

Kevin Longueil

@Jonas-Zavacky Looking good! I did a quick cut and paste of my thoughts too - my only thought was that moving her to one side of the composition would help balance the image and possibly give you the opportunity to do a longer stretch of the interesting lighting you are doing between the trees in front of her - i went a bit far with the light in my quick cut and paste but it shows the idea - just a thought though Untitled_Artwork 2.jpg

Jonas Zavacky

@Kevin-Longueil I am on the fence right now. I kinda like the composition what I have right now, but I am not 100% convinced with it and your take on it is definitely interesting (a lot) but I am not sure if it helps to convey the feel what I want from it. anyway, thanks for the suggestion.

Jonas Zavacky

alright, I think I'm done with this. Realized that I still really don't understand a whole lot about rendering hehe

evilrobot

@Jonas-Zavacky Looks fantastic. Nice work.

Jonas Zavacky

thank you @evilrobot

theprairiefox

@Jonas-Zavacky It is sweet seeing you process with these. Looking great and keep posting.

Jonas Zavacky

@theprairiefox your comment is sweet Thank you

burvantill

@Jonas-Zavacky this is nice. Whether you go with any of @Kevin-Longueil suggestions or not I think decreasing the brightness in the light beam that is behind them (on the right) will help the focus on where they are headed.

Jonas Zavacky

@burvantill Thank you! Yeah, you are right. That part is kinda stealing my attention