The moment before WIP
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Missed last month since super busy with both class and a contract, but gonna do this one!
As is tradition, feedback is always welcome as I work along
First off pitch, thumbs, and rough comps! If you had to pick one of the rough comps, which would it be?
Thanks, guys
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@Braden-Hallett
Number 3 scares me the most (height and the fact I do not swim well -I would never jump). I like 1 a bit but 3 more. Maybe have some more classmates around the pool, sitting on the edge etc. the students in the pool look too perfect.
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Dang wasting no time. I like the tension in 3 but I really like the angle in 2 more with the kids trying to add more pressure for the other kid to jump
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I vote 2 as it offers the most potential drama and suspense of the three. The last one is suspenseful but the boring shape of the pool kind of chills it compared to number 2.
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2! Vertigo is better represented on this thumbnail
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2 or 3 (post must be longer than 8 letters so here are more words lalalalalala)
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Not a lot of love for #1
Thanks for the feedback everyone!
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@Braden-Hallett I like number one. Maybe add some sharks in the water
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@Chip-Valecek sharks sharks poor guys, what about eels but I like like eels to so.
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@Heather-Boyd LOL before Lee realized that Greatest Fear was a prompt from last year the prompt thread had a lot of shark talk going on. I figured that would fit in well with the swimming pool. My kids still think there is a shark in our pool at night.
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And in the moonlight it would glow or sparkle that would be pretty.
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@Braden-Hallett I like 1 and 3 better because they each give me the sense of the jumper being apprehensive. With 2 I like the perspective and composition, but I donβt really feel the jumperβs emotions. I read into your statement that these would be emotions of the jumper. Now they could be of the watchers but I donβt experience the watchers in 2 as being anxious. Maybe a little bit impatient. I keep wanting to see someonenbiting their nails.
Iβm impressed with how good all of the comps are.
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I like two. You have the opportunity to see his face and how scared he is with that one.
ps, I like your thumbnail layout. It soothing to my OCD. -
@Braden-Hallett I think 3 as a first person perspective it makes it that extra bit daunting. The mention of sharks in the water made me think it could be turned into a cliff dive - that would make the background more dynamic with moving water and rocks sticking out on the way down.
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I go for 2 also, we get to see his "before" face
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@Braden-Hallett I vote for two also - seems like it has much more potential for story
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I vote for number 2 as well, that composition is amazing and i like that we'd see the reaction on his face!
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I prefer 2 but with a more closer shot of the character
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@nyrrylcadiz I really like the anxiety that #1 and #3 invoke. I feel like it puts the viewer right in the moment. I think #2 is the safe and reliable composition, but lacks a little in impact.
*After zooming in, I actually changed my mind a bit. When blown up, the perspective in number #2 gives a similar feeling of anxiety. So I think #2 and #3. But I still love the idea of the viewer being in the moment.
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@Chip-Valecek Sharks in a pool is exactly what I was thinking of doing when the challenge was related to fear
I brainstormed a bunch of ideas for 'the moment before' but kept coming back to the pool.
I may still do a version with sharks because I love the idea