October WIP help requested...

[chrisaakins]

Not sure if I am going to be able to do this but I do love a pen and ink challenge. Which idea is best and why?

I was thinking A is cool because it breaks the frame which I always like as a stylistic choice plus the dog is wonderfully hideous. B ties in with my Inktober theme: the reason Reb ran away and ended up at the Frou Frous. C may tell the story better. Help! Which is the best composition? Which tells the story best? Which one would you like to see on the big screen?

Sorry the picture quality is not the best...

[Chip Valecek]

@chrisaakins I like C the most. B would also be fun to work on.

[Laurel Aylesworth]

@chrisaakins C stands out for me, but maybe add some elements in the room that support how she brought him back to life (or maybe you have that in the background already? ).

[chrisaakins]

What about this one...I combined A and C.

[TwiggyT]

I really like your updated image! The best of both worlds there.

LOL, I posted this and then noticed the string of snot coming from the dog's nose. Brilliant.

[Aaron_T]

@chrisaakins Ha ha! Love that its name is "Fluffy"

[theprairiefox]

@chrisaakins I like the Fluffy as well.

But you might want to move it to the right a bit. I first read it as something attached to Fluffy's knee?

[chrisaakins]

So I think I am done. I used ball point pen and then edited it a little. I really like how it turned out. If you see any major glaring things let me know. If not I think I will submit it tomorrow.

[theprairiefox]

@chrisaakins The tag looks better. The ballpoint gives it a very nice texture.

I really like the Fluffy breaking the frame it makes the dog seem really big. I wonder if you had the smoke NOT break the frame if it would look even better. You could try it digitally pretty easy.

Nicely done.

[Chip Valecek]

@chrisaakins I love the expression on the girls face! She seems so happy. Love the snot drip LOL

I agree with @theprairiefox with the smoke, or break it even more. It almost creates a tangent on the left. The other thing you can try is to darken the background a little more, your characters would pop even more. Great work!

[chrisaakins]

Thanks @Chip-Valecek and @theprairiefox I took your advice and touched it up a little bit with PS to fix the compositional problems. I am gogin to go ahead and post it. Not sure if it is sweet 16 quality but it is by far one of my better works to date.

[J L Martin]

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[chrisaakins]

@J-L-Martin Thanks. I really love breaking the frame.

[theprairiefox]

@chrisaakins I like the changes... well done.

[MOO]

@chrisaakins Nice work. I love seeing the transformation from rough to finished.

[MOO]

@chrisaakins I also like the snot

[Zachary Drenski]

@chrisaakins this looks awesome!

[Coley]

This is really amazing!!!the little girl is so cute and happy and the dog so beat up lol. Really love the breaking the frame thing. Wonderful job!

[NicolaSchofield]

@chrisaakins the textures and shading you've created with the ball point pen are great. How big is the original?

[chrisaakins]

@neschof Thank you so much! 8x10