@Meg-Clayburn Oh this is such a great detail, i will try that too, thanks a lot 🌱

@mag hi mag, yes also like the hand drawn papery kind, maybe i will add some textures. thanks for the suggestion 🙂

@Mariana-B thank goodness. That was one I was debating on doing or self publishing pro.

@Mariana-B yeah it is the word bubble icon next to the notification bell. press it and then hit all chats, then enter my name in the search bar to start a chat 🙂

@AthenaBeana if you didn't know about the chat function, that is an option, i understand it is nerve-racking to share stuff! i'm nice though and if you tell me what you are going for and what sort of feedback you want I promise not to get intense!

It looks amazing. May be one of them is the mother and as there are dishes in the background so maybe she’s wearing an apron and has a bit long hair on her. Adding props to the zombies can make them unique i guess

@Nyrryl-Cadiz Hi and thank you for your advice! I totally agree that my hands are not the best one, so they could be definitely improved! All the best for you too!

Hi everyone I'm here to show case my work hope to see you reading it and if you want to get a hold of me message me on Instagram as Hitogami_Sensei

https://www.webtoons.com/en/challenge/gallant-witch/list?title_no=717578

https://tapas.io/series/Gallant-Witch

@kim-hunter Oh, you're so right! This detail would make it so much more believable! Thank you so much, Kim!

Hi, @adam-thornton-0 ! Thanks a lot for your feedback and ideas. I will try to paint Santa dark on light. I like your idea with hard edges. I really feel like the objects are being lost on the background. I do need to push this more. I would love to see your Santa's factory illustration too!

Thank you, @heather-boyd! I love your idea with the bear looking back at the girl!

@Melissa-Bailey-0

First off - thank you so much for giving your time to write up a thorough response! I really appreciate it - wanting to respond in kind is why I have taken so long to answer. But thank you very much! I don’t think you were too harsh or stepping on toes, but rather giving good, honest feedback.

Thanks for the kind words about the overall good things! I appreciate those too.

I agree. I think I should fix it in SOME way but didn’t want to have to do a lot of re-writing or redrawing things. So at this point for me, it’s the balance of releasing something that’s not perfect, vs spending who knows how long rewriting and re-drawing a short story.

Based on what you and @RachelArmington both said, I’ll probably tinker with their pose a little bit, and maybe her costume. Haha I think I went with the token mermaid bra so there was a small level of familiarity with the world.

Regarding number 3: That’s an excellent point that I completely missed! I will certainly cut the apology part, regardless of what else I do with it.

With the suggestion by @K.Flagg about a backstory - would a page showing/describing her character before this point be helpful, or just make it that much worse that she dies early off?

@jaepereira FC6448A2-2936-4727-9203-88E465AF746F.jpeg 9C4320D7-C5A2-40C9-B430-F133CDAF2357.jpeg 6BC6E3A6-8DAB-4B62-98D3-B0C7C1DC5599.jpeg 289FA4D5-5C14-421A-B26A-6B2550E972C8.jpeg I redid the panels a little. What do you think? Sorry, the opacity is low.

HAHAHA! That is too funny! Wow, and he has been doing this for almost 10 years! Its amazing what can happen when one fallows their dreams and just keeps at it. Super encouraging.