@Jeremiahbrown Hey thanks for the feedback, this is really helpful! I'm just starting to learn anatomy so I will definitely take what you have taught me and apply it. Appreciate it!

@ArtMelC so awesome to hear about your transition and momentum! 👏 Subscribed to your newsletter and looking to learn from you - you're inspiring!

Hi everyone I'm here to show case my work hope to see you reading it and if you want to get a hold of me message me on Instagram as Hitogami_Sensei

https://www.webtoons.com/en/challenge/gallant-witch/list?title_no=717578

https://tapas.io/series/Gallant-Witch

@Melissa-Bailey-0

First off - thank you so much for giving your time to write up a thorough response! I really appreciate it - wanting to respond in kind is why I have taken so long to answer. But thank you very much! I don’t think you were too harsh or stepping on toes, but rather giving good, honest feedback.

Thanks for the kind words about the overall good things! I appreciate those too.

I agree. I think I should fix it in SOME way but didn’t want to have to do a lot of re-writing or redrawing things. So at this point for me, it’s the balance of releasing something that’s not perfect, vs spending who knows how long rewriting and re-drawing a short story.

Based on what you and @RachelArmington both said, I’ll probably tinker with their pose a little bit, and maybe her costume. Haha I think I went with the token mermaid bra so there was a small level of familiarity with the world.

Regarding number 3: That’s an excellent point that I completely missed! I will certainly cut the apology part, regardless of what else I do with it.

With the suggestion by @K.Flagg about a backstory - would a page showing/describing her character before this point be helpful, or just make it that much worse that she dies early off?