@Quackamos @gavpartridge thank you so much for your ideas and draw-overs, they are giving me a lot to think about! Here’s where I left the work yesterday. I’m going to shelf it for now and work on the next project but I’m going to keep layout and lighting in mind when i come back to it. I just started Will Terry’s painting Light & Shadow class and I think it will be very helpful. I think another takeaway from this piece is I need to spend a little more time thumbnailing to get the best composition planned before setting to work.
@Jeremy-Ross , @aprilshin , @Neha-Rawat I enjoyed making both of them in different ways, but I'm more confident in the first being more appropriate to the challenge than the second. The tone of the short story doesn't gel with the second image I drew. It may be more visually interesting, but the short story seems to hinge so much on Bongo's confident fearlessness and wit (bordering on arrogance) that I feel like the second image just doesn't apply... The second image has more of a Jungle Book-vibe that speaks to danger a bit more. I don't ever feel Bongo is in much actual danger in the short story prompt--in fact, it seems he knew what he was doing all along...
I'm agreeing with some of what @tombarrettillo has pointed out.
The helmet does seem a bit large, but perhaps that was intentional? It's hard to know without what your other work is like.
-The top foot placement also seems awkward to me. I feel like there should be some indication of a foot rest.
-The shadow feels a bit oppressive. I would think about lightening it up and introducing some subtle color into it, and adding some gradation to the background might make it feel a bit more polished.
This was an ambitious drawing to take on, so well done for seeing it through!
This is excellent, thank you @Chip-Valecek and @TessW I'll be looking into color saturation over my weekend and I'll see about adjusting this piece in particular. And as for Eye shading, I definitely would have but I totally forgot so I'll touch that up when I attempt to saturate colors.
@Chip-Valecek I see what you're saying about the lineweight, that is one of those things I have to be thinking about otherwise I am totally oblivious to it. My pen/Tablet is pressure sensitive so some of them on the inside of say the tree may come out thin but if they are one stroke they tend to be the same thickness, as the robot is. But I can see where they can be thinner.
I originally drew this in ink for Inktober last year and I liked it so much that I decided to draw and paint it digitally. My parents were in town for the last three weeks, so I have not had time to post anything. In the meantime, I have completely forgotten how to post in the Illustrations subcategory, as I can't remember how I did it the first time!
I think this piece is so lovely, and most of my thoughts have been covered already.
Another thing you might try and see how you like them is to add a bit of bounce light on the tree and girl and dog to add even more contracts to them.
I also thought maybe you could give us something of interest towards the bottom of the screen that adds to the story- right now everything interesting happens in the upper 1/3 of the image and there's nothing else to really lead us around the rest of that space, other than your lovely painting. (Very slap-dash) thoughts I had were low-contrast fireflies, a dark cat climbing the ladder, a sign tacked to the lower left tree that says "no boys allowed" or something like that, a few lizards or mice climbing up the ladder, more bats.
Alternatively, if you want her to be the center of the image and for the scene to feel serene, solid and strong, you could bring the action down more toward the center of the page, or extend the painting up a bit further.