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    • Naroth Kean
      Naroth Kean last edited by

      Hi everyone! I would like to get some opinion on this piece. Do you think that big rock is way too center on the page? Does it matter when it is at the gutter? Text will go at the biggest white cloud. Thank you in advance! 12.jpg

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      • Kevin Longueil
        Kevin Longueil SVS OG last edited by

        I think so Naroth - my brain wants to move the big rock to where the rock with the birds are - and possibly put the bird rock where the little rock on the right is ....maybe not so far to the right but over there - you could paint another flying fish on that side at a smaller scale so it is about the same distance back as the rock with birds and you could have the little birds looking up at the flying fish....or not 🙂 long answer to a short question - yes i think it will be too large and mysterious if the the big rock is in the gutter - could be wrong though...i do love your painting though!

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        • Naroth Kean
          Naroth Kean last edited by Naroth Kean

          @Kevin-Longueil Thank you, that is a very good suggestion. The original was only half page but I decided to extend the whole page and realized something is weird about the rock haha. it was like this. Thanks again.
          19_Clear-sky.jpg

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          • Naroth Kean
            Naroth Kean last edited by

            here the change! 12.jpg

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            • Kevin Longueil
              Kevin Longueil SVS OG last edited by

              This looks good - each page reads well as its own composition and the spread reads well as a composition too - i don't think this is necessary but i think it is a bit of a home run when you make it happen - the text will add visual weight to the right side of the composition too as you said - i like how you changed the birds to have them looking in different directions with only a few having discovered the flying fish - really looks nice!

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              • Naroth Kean
                Naroth Kean last edited by

                🙂 thank you so much I really like the change as well.

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                • Lee Holland
                  Lee Holland last edited by

                  looks good Naroth. The change really helped. I like the watercolour look and the cloud looks nice.

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                  • Dan Tavis
                    Dan Tavis last edited by

                    I think the change looks great! Excellent watercolor

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                    • bharris
                      bharris last edited by

                      This is very sweet!Everything stands out really well , even in all blue tones!

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                      • Rob Smith
                        Rob Smith last edited by

                        I like the change and your color choice is great. Nice!!

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                          seanwelty @Naroth Kean last edited by

                          @Naroth-Kean if this is a sunny day you can push that idea more by adding more contrast to the fish in the foreground. Most likely, the tops of the fish would be in full light and should be the lightest value in the image. Add some cast shadows from the wings/fins and wrap the shadows around the bod to show form. These fish would be very shiny and will have very defined specular highlights.

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                          • Naroth Kean
                            Naroth Kean last edited by

                            @Lee-Holland @Dan-Tavis @Bharris @Rob-Smith Thank you guys I really appreciate it!
                            @seanwelty Thanks Sean, that is a very good suggestion.

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                            • Leontine
                              Leontine @Naroth Kean last edited by

                              @Naroth-Kean beautiful! Flying fishes are so funny! I love the colors, and the composition is very good. Good Job Naroth!

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                              • Lee White
                                Lee White SVS Team SVS Instructor Pro SVS OG last edited by

                                Very nice!

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                                • Naroth Kean
                                  Naroth Kean last edited by

                                  @Leontine @Lee-White 🙂 Thanks a lot guys! much appreciate.

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