Hey everyone, I’ve been trying to develop this comic. It’s not totally finished obviously. I was just wondering what are your thoughts on composition, storytelling, perspective... Any advice, or criticism? Any feedback at all would be great!
@phoenix-yip Great work! Can you tell us more about it?
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@Nyrryl-Cadiz Basically, there's a bounty hunter who is sent out to assassinate that person for committing an act of treason against their lord, and their race. They end up having a motorcycle chase, which leads to the target being shot down.
On page two are you showing the hunter pulling the gun out pointing then shooting? Or is the hunter shooting with two hands?
@jaepereira He's just shooting with one hand
@phoenix-yip I like the flow but in some cases, like the “pull out gun, then fire gun” example I’d eliminate a panel or two.
@jaepereira Alright, thank you
@jaepereira 
I redid the panels a little. What do you think? Sorry, the opacity is low.
@Nyrryl-Cadiz Basically, there's a bounty hunter who is sent out to assassinate that person for committing an act of treason against their lord, and their race. They end up having a motorcycle chase, which leads to the target being shot down.
