September contest WIP idea looking for feedback
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@j-sienkowski thanks, I'm toying with that, appreciate the input!
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In case anyone in still here hanging around........I did up more thumbnails and now looking at this one.......these two side by side are almost the same except for the perspective on the chalkboard and words on the chalkboard. It's now a tilted compostion so it's not so static and the girl is really small and in front of her dragon to show the size a bit. she is reading from her notes and oblivious to everyone freaking out around her lol. the shadow shows a bit of the dragon's head shape and a bit of smoke from his nose/mouth. any thoughts appreciated
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@Coley I like the direction this is going. It definitely is less static which adds to the chaotic feel of her classmates freaking out. I would suggest making sure you don't lose too much of the silhouette of the dragon's shadow otherwise it makes it hard to determine what kind of animal/creature it is. As far as the chalkboard a prefer the one on the right. Good work.
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@j-sienkowski thanks for the feedback
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I have a teacher and a few kids rough sketched in. Was going to add maybe another kid, they will overlap a bit in places as well, right now I am just wondering if they are believable in terms of perspective and scale etc. they;re still quite rough! also threw in a shadow and did a sketch with an without a dragon, playing with figuring out if it's better with or without! Any thoughts much appreciated!!
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@Coley love your composition and idea. My first thought is the shadow looks like a giraffe, so more dinosaur if that is what you are going for.
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@holleywilliamson This is looking very nice! I think the perspective mostly works. If you haven't already, throw down some perspective lines to really see, sometimes it becomes really obvious with just a few guidelines.
I know you said this is still really rough, but I just wanted to say that the thing that pops for me most is that I want the teacher to have an even bigger reaction. Right now she seems a bit more disapproving than scared.
I like the contrast of the one kid who's like yay!
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thanks @holleywilliamson and @robgale
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I did some more drawing and enlarged the kid characters, added a dragon mouth looking down, changed some of the gestures so they're less scared and more happy. hopefully they are happy shocked not just happy? i need to put some things in on the right side and the little girl will have combat boots to contrast with the dressy and ponytail etc. Chalkboard will say " Show and Tell" or something like that. I was going to try to ink it and then scan and then throw back in photoshop but it's evolving. I'm not sure it's the best concept actually and thinking about starting over with something else totally different, but I'm sure there's merit to staying the course as well...........a bit torn but keeping on!
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@Coley this drawing is so adorable! I noticed a few things you might want to consider.
The first is how most of the class and the teacher have lovely happy expressions. The prompt calls for shocked, but it depends on you’re ultimate goal for the illustration. Happy might fit better as a portfolio piece. Adjusting them to shocked might fit the prompt closer.
The boy in front looks like he’s floating. At first I thought the girl behind him was holding him up, but her hands look more like holding him back. If that is what she’s doing his feet need to be more grounded. Maybe he fell back and she caught him? His position and her position relative to him needs a little clarification. Complicated little bodies to pose!
The last thing I noticed is that in such a nicely in perspective classroom the large dragon scales seem not to fit in the same perspective. That might just be how they are constructed, but it looks off right now. Here’s a little sketch over of what I mean. The ellipses of the scales don’t follow the established perspective.
Can’t wait to see how it progresses!
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@Shara-Mills ah, wow, thanks
for the expressions, I initally had them looking frightened but it seemed a bit too scary, so I made them happy, I'll work for something in between!
I'm actually considering starting over another new one lol! Will see what happens, I had another idea. But maybe I'll end up doing both (submitting only one of course lol).