Alright! Here’s where it is after some further dialing in.
I looked at adding some more overt election signs, almost pick picket signs, but I didn't like how it effected the balance. I might come back to that idea after later with some more tests. I almost would put in an election banner across the top of the hall, but I like how the ceiling is kind of acting as a white space for text placement.
I’m debating the hard white stroke. I think my next test will be to tidy up that edge under the stroke and see how the focal point and visual hierarchy hold up. The stroke feels like a cheat. I don’t normally use them in an illustration like this, but I wanted try it.
I also think I need to bump up the darker shadows around her hand on our right. I worked on it, but it’s still blending in quite a bit.
Oh! I also want to put some hard light shapes on the lockers to make them read more like shiny metal.
I also wonder if I need to lighten the darker hair colors so they don’t take away attention. They seem mostly balanced and secondary to the focal point. How do you think the additional coloring is working?
And here are two text options I tried out for fun. I’ll probably leave the final submission without text though.