Thanks everyone! B seems to be the clear winner. I suppose the white outline worked well with my inktobers because it was just the character and not a full illustration. @TessaW and @Adrian-K here is a version with just the splatters.
So wonderful Simona! love these..I think my preference is the more realistic boy as well.
There is an artist in Ontario...her name is Elly MacKay whose process involves cutting out her characters and setting them up in scenes to then photograph. Quite amazing.. you’d enjoy her work. (Theaterclouds.com)
@gary-wilkinson Thanks so much. I always appreciate your feedback and feel that I learn something valuable every time. Next time I have a free moment, I'll revisit the illustration and try making the changes you describe, just to make sure I understand and cement these tips in my brain for when I compose my next piece. Composition is an area that I'm working on improving.
I agree that making the cat interact with the travel icons makes sense and a more connected piece. I don't want the cat to be frustrated or angry, though--he's just happy doing his own thing.
Here are the changes so far...
@miriam I finished it and sent it in but I get what you mean! Thanks! I thought the little fish behind the whale would give it some more depth but I didn't take the colours into account. Something to think about next time
I wanted to see what it would look like with @juliepeelart's suggestion of moving the horizon line. I hope you don't mind that I did a quick edit & moved the horizon to the top 1/3 line on the page (which is still quite a bit lower than the original--so you might want to play around with it some more).
@gary-wilkinson I agree with all your points thoroughly. I had a bit of trouble with this piece and it seems to have just gotten away from me the more i painted! For now I'll stash it away i think and come back to it at a later date to try and fix it. I'll keep with me what i've learned from it and apply it to my future concepts, which i'm a bit more excited for (i was never super excited about this concept in the first place haha) Thank you very much for your words, your critique will be very helpful to me in the future i think!
Thank you all for your kindly advice, it is fun to have others eyes to see.
I think kind-a got a little fixated on aspects of technique, and if I'm honest, that tree image on conformed to flag was the impetus for the work (at least partly). @TwiggyT @Miriam @RHirsch @Sofie_designed Thank you
From a quick image search, it looks like the Skottie Young style also usually has the eyes a little lower on the face. In some drawings, the eyes have a little bit of a diagonal slant & are slightly pointed at the corners--esp. the inner corner of the eyes, but in other images they are more rounded ovals.