Nighfall WIP Requesting Feedback
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Hi there!
I'm adding to the forum another WIP post of the February Contest of Nightfall. This is what I'm coming up with so far. What do you guys think so far? The colors? Perspective? Can there be more narrative? Just curious what else I can do to make it have more interest! Thank you!
“We must stop eating!' cried Toad as he ate another.”
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@Miranda-Branley Do you have reference you're using for the time of day and the general lighting situation?
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@Miranda-Branley I like the concept. I would bring down the background glow. It's a bit bright for nighfall and the fireflies (or lightning bugs as we in the South say) are getting lost. The characters are great and are very cute.
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@Braden-Hallett Yes! I was using this image for the sky to make it seem like it's nightfall aka dusk, and I also wanted to include a lake to reflect the sky so I was planning on adding a small boat in the back or a dock or something!
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@chrisaakins Thank you!
I was going for a transition to night time with pinks, oranges and purples, but I think I can bring in the purple a little bit more to make it clear that it's about to be night time. I think for the lightning bugs, I'm going to actually add their bodies and wings. Just faint enough so that they have a bit more detail. -
@Braden-Hallett Oh and I wanted to have the lightning bugs be the main source of lighting! Should I have another light source?
“We must stop eating!' cried Toad as he ate another.”
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The characters are so cute and I like where you're going with things
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I think this is a cute image! But I didn’t realize they were by trees and a lake until you mentioned your reference photo. I know it doesn’t make sense, but I almost read it as a window. Maybe you could make the trees branchier so that it’s immediately clear what they are?
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@Miranda-Branley Cool! Neat water reflections will certainly add to the piece
I think having a primary light source MAY help? It's certainly something you could try out. I may try just having the kids more ambiently lit and have the fireflies have a lot less of an effect on the lighting.
I'm not sure, though. I'll have to think about it
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This is very lovely. I'm wondering why the older boy looks worried.
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This is a really beautiful start. I love the colors and lighting and the overall atmosphere. I want to be there! The thing that probably stands out most to me, is that you could use eye direction to help with the flow of the piece a little more. I'm thinking the two characters on the right could have their eye directions looking slightly more to the left, or perhaps alter the girl on the right's pose a tad more to face the left. It wouldn't take much and I think it would help us move our eye through the piece a little more smoothly. Just a thought.
