WIP - Can you tell what is happening in this piece?
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Can anybody tell what is happening in this piece? I know the drawing is still pretty rough and they're aspects that don't make sense yet (like how the balloons are attached), but I want to work out the pose of the little girl before I start to tighten it up.
Any feedback is welcome and appreciated. Thanks!
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@j-sienkowski the little girls pose does look a little awkward specifically her right leg and left arm but over all I think it’s a really strong composition I love the fact that it’s raining candy
I’m sure others can’t give some better advice I’m still learning a lot my self but I can’t wait to see how the progresses 
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The girl is taking the zebra for an adventure to/from a sky city when it starts raining candy. Am I right?
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The concept is so whimsical and cute. Who wouldn't love flying through a storm of candy?! Two things are standing out to me. Is the piece of candy on the bottom left attached to the lady bug or is it falling from the sky like the others? Just seems a little bit unclear. And then I'm wondering why the balloons are patched together? It seems like the little girl has this professional equipment (saddle, side bag, etc) so the hand made balloons seem maybe a bit out of place story-wise. I might be totally off base (I'm just starting out with narrative illustration) but that's my take. Apart from those things, and the pose as you mentioned, I think the piece is really great, would love to see it finished with all the popping and fun candy colors!
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@j-sienkowski it took a while but is she picking the candies which are falling down like rain?
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@ambiirae Thanks. I’ll work on the pose of the girl. It’s kind of hard to find good reference of children on horses
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@NelsonYiap You are correct. I was hoping it was obvious that the girl is catching and collecting the candy.
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@lauramarie_art The lady bug is collecting the candy...maybe adding other creatures doing the same would help? My thought process with the balloons was that after venturing out several times in a candy storm they would have needed to be patched. Plus, I think the patches help added some visual interest to some boring circular balloons
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@Nyrryl-Cadiz That’s right! Do you think it would be easier to figure out if she was using a butterfly net to catch the candy?
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@j-sienkowski I think it would be better if the lady bug would hold the candy and have open her back wings (I don't know how this is called by a bug, wings?) Maybe change little bit the girl, taht she isn't almost falling down the horse and the back feet are very realistic, but the front horse feet need more work. I love the horse expression. I am looking forward what color YOu will do this piece.
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I can see it's raining candy, however, the pair are flying above the clouds! That makes it feel out of place to me. I like that the zebra is getting in on the sweets action, but maybe tip it's head up a little. Like when kids catch raindrops on their tongues. Also, if you made the balloons bigger they would feel more dynamic and fill in your space. Oh, that's a saddlebag full of candy isn't it? I just realized that, so maybe a couple detailed candies sticking out would help it read better. As for the patchwork balloons, just add a couple patches to the saddle blanket and you'll have continuity.
So cute. I can see this in rainbows of colors!
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@j-sienkowski Oh I love that idea with balloons actually, it makes the piece that much more charming, good thinking!
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@Washu Thanks for the suggestions!
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@MichaelaH Thanks! The front legs do need work. I’m going do some more sketches using your lady bug wings out suggestion.
