Tom Shannon's WIP: WHEN SUMMER VACATION GOES WRONG.
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Hey everyone,
Attached four concepts. I don't want to say too much, let the comps speak for themselves. ( curious if they read or not on their own terms. ) Feedback would greatly be appreciated. Thank you in advance for your time!!
-TS
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@Tom-Shannon Hahahaha! I LOVE the first one. It is so funny. I wonder if you could emphasize the smoking charredness of it even more. The lady's expression is priceless. Too much sun. Probably a redhead like my wife,
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Hmm I think in the first there is invisible man taking sun bath beside this women? Second...some clouds forming a body and making shadows? But mabye I don't understand the story. I like the first better
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@chrisaakins Thanks for the feedback/kind words Chris! Good advice. I agree, there needs to be smoke involved.
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Awesome feedback, thank you Michael. The second idea is about a flying dragon, or monster, zooming over its soon to be pray. The idea is a little fuzzy, now I look at it more. This is the wonderful thing about doing rough thumbnails!
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@Tom-Shannon Both your ideas are really fun, but I really like the first one more! It's such a funny concept. I read it as a person being burnt in their seat from all the sunbathing. I love it.
@chrisaakins' idea to add smoke sounds great.
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@animatosoor Thank you for the feedback and kind words!
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These are fun! I like the simplicity of all of these. The first one looks like it could easily be in The New Yorker. I think for the second one you need someone looking/pointing up in terror or a dog chasing it or something... maybe the shadow shows a person clutched in it's claws. For the third one, it might be cool to frame it with a photo style frame/border (polaroid?) to drive home the idea that they are posing for a photo. They are posing, right? Might be fun to do a sequence here. Either way, this is a great "moment before" image. The image here is crystal clear and I love the dog's expression.
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All great ideas!
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I like the 2nd but I love the first and third! I agree with others remarks on the first and I wish there was a faster way to read the third as a family photo pic being taken. It feels to me like it's already in the album and maybe that's what you wanted. Still, I love the idea!
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I'm a fan of the first one. It's simple and funny. Maybe a little smoke or something could exemplify what's going on.
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I actually like the concept of number 3. It may get be more interesting if it wasn't straight on. The moment before!
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@Brad-Newman Thanks Brad. I agree with your comments. #3 is a posing photo, for sure. I thought of the frame/border photo idea too. Maybe a black and white photo so I can capture those really cool old school photo edge shapes? A person clutched in the claws of concept #2 is a great idea. Maybe the monster's nose, part of its head could be visible too? I'm glad you're seeing the general ideas. I appreciate your feedback!
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@lmrush Thanks Lisa!
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@Tom-Shannon 333333333333
Omg so much 3! I love the dogs mistrustful gaze
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@Tom-Shannon said in Tom Shannon's WIP: WHEN SUMMER VACATION GOES WRONG.:
3 and 4 are good. I love the dog in number three. Well, 3 is still my favorite.
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@Tom-Shannon i personally like 1 because I’ve never seen an illustration like it possibly before. The other three are great but 1 stands out because of its uniquenes. Great job
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@Nyrryl-Cadiz @Marsha-Kay-Ottum-Owen @sarahlawrence Thank you everyone for the awesome feedback. Feels like #3 and #1 are about 50/50. It's always interesting and educational sharing artwork. I'll do my best to return the favor!
