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    • Charlie Eve Ryan
      Charlie Eve Ryan Pro SVS OG last edited by Charlie Eve Ryan

      I did not have this ready for today, but wanted to share it here for feedback.Poecoversm.jpg

      Happy Creating
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      • mattramsey
        mattramsey last edited by

        Like the high color contrast. You may want to tweak the bird a bit--it's looking more dove/pigeon like than raven like (as I see it--others may see differently).

        Do the white lines on the hill represent something? They are a cool element but maybe instead of just lines they could be some other type of form that would reference his stores

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        • Charlie Eve Ryan
          Charlie Eve Ryan Pro SVS OG last edited by

          Hi Matt, thanks...I think you are right the beak is too short. I'll work on that! 😃

          Happy Creating
          www.charlieeveryan.com

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            seanwelty @Charlie Eve Ryan last edited by

            @Charlie-Eve-Ryan Are you the one that posted the red riding hood image. I recognize the brush and have the same feeling that the texture gets to be a bit mechanical and repetitive? If you are going for a natural media look it sort of breaks the illusion. Be careful to add a bit more variety in the textures.

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            • Lydia M
              Lydia M last edited by

              I dig the heart pupil concept, the contrast and the texture! The raven looks a little dazed and lovestruck though with the heart in his eye and his head tilted skyward. I don't know Poe very well but my impression has always been he was a melancholy fellow. The raven came to him when he was in deep grief and didn't bring any hope, so maybe if you flipped it so he's coming in from the top and looking down? It would read more like oppressive and suffocating grief (which is exactly what you want in art, right?! Ha!)

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              • Charlie Eve Ryan
                Charlie Eve Ryan Pro SVS OG @seanwelty last edited by

                @seanwelty Thanks Sean, I'll add some variety in the feathers.

                Happy Creating
                www.charlieeveryan.com

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                • Charlie Eve Ryan
                  Charlie Eve Ryan Pro SVS OG @Lydia M last edited by

                  @gimmehummus Thanks for the feedback, I'll test that out and see if it feels more dramatic.

                  Happy Creating
                  www.charlieeveryan.com

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                  • Charlie Eve Ryan
                    Charlie Eve Ryan Pro SVS OG last edited by

                    Here is a revised version...Poecover3flatsm.jpg

                    Happy Creating
                    www.charlieeveryan.com

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                    • Charlie Eve Ryan
                      Charlie Eve Ryan Pro SVS OG last edited by

                      Here is one with a quick border on it, since it is getting a bit lost against the white site page.

                      Poecover3flatsme.jpg

                      Happy Creating
                      www.charlieeveryan.com

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                      • Suzy Heitz
                        Suzy Heitz last edited by

                        I love your aesthetic. This piece is evolving nicely too. Did you consider putting the elements on a toned gray background instead of the stark white? Even the shade of red could be more ominous. Perhaps with some of your texture and shadow. Poe is so dark and this piece is somewhat bright. The other think that I noticed first was the direction of the tears. It's right in your first iteration, but now that the bird is facing down, the direction of flow would change also. Consider what makes sense and ignore the rest. 🙂

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                        • Charlie Eve Ryan
                          Charlie Eve Ryan Pro SVS OG last edited by Charlie Eve Ryan

                          Thanks Suzy. Testing out a darker background and added some splatter.Poecover3flatrevisedsm2.jpg

                          Happy Creating
                          www.charlieeveryan.com

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                          • Charlie Eve Ryan
                            Charlie Eve Ryan Pro SVS OG last edited by

                            I pulled back a bit on the gray on the bottom to let some of the white through.

                            Poecover3flatrevisedsm3.jpg

                            Happy Creating
                            www.charlieeveryan.com

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                            • Thrace
                              Thrace @Charlie Eve Ryan last edited by

                              @Charlie-Eve-Ryan These are awesome! I think I like the second one with a little white coming through. Its too bad you didn't have a chance to enter!

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                              • Lydia M
                                Lydia M last edited by

                                With his head angled down he looks more hopeless. Nice! I looked at the negative space in his neck and it made me think of a hill so what about this....?

                                idea.jpg

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                                • Charlie Eve Ryan
                                  Charlie Eve Ryan Pro SVS OG @Thrace last edited by

                                  @Thrace-Shirley-Mears Thank you! I'll do next month for sure, I had a few things going on so I didn't enter this time. It was a fun one to work on though.

                                  Happy Creating
                                  www.charlieeveryan.com

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                                  • Charlie Eve Ryan
                                    Charlie Eve Ryan Pro SVS OG @Lydia M last edited by

                                    @gimmehummus Oh nice! Good eye, that is pretty sweet looking!

                                    Happy Creating
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