9 May 2019, 05:55

Before
SIGROSS The Moment Before.jpg

After
SIGROSS The Moment Before after crit.jpg

Took on-board what @Lee-White said about my penguin scene. I appreciate and agreed with the feedback.

Made my protagonist penguin a bit more flamboyant. He's of the Macaroni ilk. Spearheading the deep ocean dive I can feel his leadership qualities (His co-stars are based on Adelie penguins). They both hang out in Antarctic waters.

I think I got carried away with drawing penguins that it was hard to lose characters. I wanted them to all get equal billing. But that made me lose sight of the story of building tension and focus for the Moment Before brief.

Happy to hear any further comments. Have others made changes to their work after listening to the feedback?