Kumari WIP

[ArtistErin]

My idea for Kumari, a shipwrecked adventurer who doesn't know the end has happened for him quite yet because he's unconscious lying on the beach. However his new bird friends have discovered another element that has washed ashore, a genie in a bottle...

So the goofy birds are a Blue-footed booby and a Pelican, they are always getting into trouble accidentally and their curiosity leads to great finds Just rambling to try to percolate some other silliness. Any thoughts on how to create the genie in the bottle "almost" coming out? Should I make the genie stay in? Or trying to squeeze out?

[Asyas_illos]

@ArtistErin I don’t think seeing the genie is necessary, great concept, though at first I didn’t notice the body back there and assumed Kamari was one of the birds. Maybe he could be reaching out for it? Or it may unfold better as you color.

[ArtistErin]

@Asyas_illos Good point, thank you, I want to give the impression this genie wants out, and Kamari (ha I misspelled it in the title) doesn't know yet but the birds do. Will post as more color helps outline everything.

[beccabee_draws]

@ArtistErin I thought Kumari was inside of the lamp at first. Just with the contrast, I think that area of the picture really caught my eye. It's in the foreground too, so feels like it's the focus of the image... but I agree w Asyas, maybe with colour and lighting you can make Kumari stand out more.

[ArtistErin]

Thoughts on this development?

Wanted Kamari to be the focal point and figured out you guys were confused about who Kamari is.

Hope this reads clearer...

[Eric Castleman]

@ArtistErin I like where this concept has moved towards. My only tidbit to add is that the bottom of the pelicans beak needs to be in better perspective. Make the circle flatter a bit.

[AngelinaKizz]

@ArtistErin the new one is better, though I think you could lose the person in the background. It feels too dark.

[ArtistErin]

@Eric-Castleman Awesome. Yes, I see that.

Here's a redraw of the pelican... So much better thank you. Your thoughts on this new development?

[ArtistErin]

@AngelinaKizz Ahhh like he died and he's just a dead body! EW yep ok losing the comatose friend.

LMAO

[Pamela Fraley]

@ArtistErin I like this concept. I agree with the others that the body is a bit dark. Maybe you could take it out and add the other bird back in. It was such a acute bird, I was a little sad to see him taken out.

[katsuds]

I absolutely love this concept! I agree about taking out the background character. Loving the idea of adding the original bird back in and also keeping the boy. He adds more depth to the story. I don't think you need to fully see the genie but just having a hint of a genie is a good idea. We can definitely tell from the lamp what is about to happen. Love where you are going with this and I can't wait to see the finished piece. And side note, this could also work for the glow prompt. having the genie with a slight glow could be interesting. Excited for this.

[ArtistErin]

@Pamela-Fraley I took him out initially because it seemed too busy with the friend laying there ha ha and looking at this again I see I can try it. It helps to have fresh eyes today:) I like this Blue Footed booby!

[mag]

@ArtistErin I think this is awesome! and I do like it better without the second character lying on the beach, I must say
Maybe I would crop the image a little bit (loose a bit of the left side of your illustration), cause all the action is on the right side and it seams a bit off balance? But maybe that's just me. Great job!

[ArtistErin]

@mag COOL! Thank you

[Pamela Fraley]

@ArtistErin LOVE!! Your birds are adorable.

[ArtistErin]

@Pamela-Fraley AWW thank you

[ArtistErin]

Kamari color...

Feeling hesitant to submit! Hope I'm making progress here. Wondering if this looks alright and clear, good rendering?

Thoughts welcome...

[Kim Rosenlof]

@ArtistErin This is looking good. I like your concept and the characters. I think that the ship is lost in this version. I think you need to make sure it is more visible since it tells us the "end" part of the prompt. Also, watch for the tangent of the right bird and the ocean horizon line. I also like that you are using a limited pallet.

[LittleRaven]

@ArtistErin I really like your concept. As for my feedback, my attention is really drawn to the bird on the right. I think this is because it has the most colour contrast on its beak (the bright saturated orange against the blue background), maybe make the orange a little less saturated. And I think the other bird should also look at the lamp, now it's just looking at the birds feet and nothing is going there. Keep up the good work!

[ArtistErin]

Kamari update...

Needed to make the shipwreck more clear and also show Kamari just discovered a hidden treasure chest. What do think about the crabs I added? Trying to avoid over rendering the sand but do you think it needs something?
@Kim-Rosenlof thank you for your feedback! So much appreciation I see the eyes on the blue footed booby need to be more clear but otherwise I think I'll go ahead and submit this.