Cloud Critique Welcomed!

[Katherine]

Hi folks, I didn't manage to finish my Cloud entry in time so I submitted a less finished version of this. But this is my finished version. Not sure anyone's going to be able to work out what's going on here. Eeep. So do let me know if you have no idea what you're looking at

I really need to get better at posting wip for critique as I go!

[von_Nimmermehr]

Hey,
i think the device looks quite nice, but i really have no clue how this two pictures go together. They also don't look like as if they belong together. Would love to read about yout thoughts.

[susanhowarth.art]

@Katherine I really like your rendering style, especially the textures! But no, I don’t understand what’s going on.

[Asyas_illos]

I see it, the machine creates clouds. The cloud started a rainstorm inside and now the house is filling up with water. I love it I think they look cohesive as well I could see it in a book, with a spot illustration on one side and and the full bleed on the other. Nice work I’m sorry you didn’t get to enter your finished piece.

[Asyas_illos]

@Katherine i can’t get enough it’s so gorgeous

[Katherine]

@Asyas_illos Congratulations Asya, you got it! Gosh, you should probably get a prize or some such.And yes they are facing pages in a book.

[Asyas_illos]

@Katherine I love it seriously️

[A Former User]

@Katherine Very lovely piece. Asyas explanation helped me understand the story. I love the story! I didn't immediately come to it though.

About the illustration, could you push the darks more around the creature so it has more of a silhouette?

Very lovely piece!

[Nyrryl Cadiz]

@Katherine Awesome! love it. My one critique might be the cloud. Maybe show it from the bottom up.

[Katherine]

@von_Nimmermehr Thanks for the feedback — is it that the machine is in a different style to the rest of the illustration, that it doesn't look like it belongs?

[Katherine]

@susanhowarth-art Thanks Susan — the machine on the left is producing rain clouds and the characters are under water from all the raining inside

[Katherine]

@Asyas_illos Thank you so much!!!

[Katherine]

@Stephanie-H Thanks Stephanie — I see what you mean about the values. My problem was I had them all worked out then added that window at the last minute. Then I felt like I needed to make the creature's face darker to stand out against the window — but now it doesn't stand out against the wall!

[Katherine]

@Nyrryl-Cadiz I see what you mean about the cloud! I didn't bother drawing that bit in perspective and just eye-balled it. I've had another crack, using my vanishing points:

[kirsten-mcg]

@Katherine I think this is one reason why stand alone prompts are so hard. In a book with a story, this illustration would totally make since, and the readers would get it immediately! But without text I was lost until I read @Asyas_illos comment. But still, the rendering and your story is lovely! And the rain from the cloud looks great now.

[Kim Rosenlof]

@Katherine The style is great and I love the characters. I think the clouds look more like bubbles than clouds, and to produce that much water, I feel like there should be more clouds on the right side.

[Pamela Fraley]

I get it more now that I read all the comments. I’m still a little confused about the creature that’s with the girl under the water. But, I really love your style! I love the rendering and your values and just everything about how you draw. I think this is one of those that would make so much sense in the context of a book.

[Griffin McPherson]

@Katherine so I get that this machine on the left is making clouds and I see that there’s a small cloud in the right image but otherwise these two sides feel disconnected. Is this supposed to be like we are looking at a spread in a picture book so we have the machine on one side and the flooded room on the other?