My Cloud WIP
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Hello SVS Team! I hope all is well. Sharing with you an illustration for cloud. Do you think it represent the prompt? Boring idea? I appreciate your feedback!!! Thank you in advance!
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@Tom-Shannon This is some real nice line work. I wouldn't say boring. I would say it's not quite 100% clear. At first, I thought the cloud was just blowing, but upon review, I'm thinking it actually might be sneezing the rain out. Clarifying that might just be adjusting the cloud expression to where either the eyes look more sneezy or the mouth tells a story about letting the rain out for a reason.
Maybe there's some story as to where the water is going out. Maybe the rain made the cloud sneeze? Maybe one of the rain drops is proudly carrying a feather used to tickle the cloud's nose or something like that?
Great line work, though. You're well on your way to a great piece.
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@KevinTreaccar Thank Kevin! Great feedback! I may use the feather idea...hmmm.
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@Tom-Shannon Exciting line work and concept. Lots of energy. I really like the cloud's expression. I see the big cloud blowing a gust of wind to propel the raindrops down to earth. The raindrops at present both have almost identical expressions. Perhaps you might vary their gazes and expressions to distinguish them a bit?
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@Tom-Shannon this is brilliant. I don't think the concept is boring at all... I would like to see the poses of the rain droplets being pushed more to the extreme though, like those surfer or skateboarder pose on billboard ads
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@ArtMelC I agree with your feedback. I thought of this very idea after posting my comp. More expression for sure!! Thank you!
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@Johanna-Kim Thank you for the kind words Johanna! I'm with you, the rain drops are too static and boring. I'll rework it and post an update soon.
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@Tom-Shannon Very cool work, Tom. Definitely a good concept too. Just as an idea, maybe try having the droplets riding sailboards. Just thinking that windsurfing may fit better.
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@Erichousel oh man, that is a good idea! Thank you for the feedback!!
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@Tom-Shannon I've made a few updates. Thank you @Erichousel for the wind surfing idea. Thank you @ArtMelC, @Johanna-Kim, and @KevinTreaccar for your feedback!! Latest update.
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@Tom-Shannon Much better with the wind surfing! Awesome!
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@Tom-Shannon super cool!
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@ArtMelC Thank you again for your feedback!
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@Jeremiahbrown Thank you!!
