#pitmad #pbpitch feedback thread
HeatherBouteneff last edited by
Is anyone else doing these? Looking for feedback (and to offer mine to others) on my images and pitch. Last minute since one of them is tomorrow lol.
Ode MacDonald Had a Phone
Ode is overwhelmed by crows on her farm until some autocorrected texts by the animals send her husband on a wacky shopping spree for items that end up inspiring the perfect solution. #pitmad #pb #authorillustrator
Not sure if I should add comp titles? Maybe Little Red Gliding Hood x Click Clack Moo
RachelArmington last edited by
Wow, you could include the comps and still be under 280 characters!
I personally resist including comps, because I am cantankerous and feel as if an agent should be way more versed in marketing and current children's books than I am (even though I try to stay as current as I can). I also wonder if an agent will be turned off is a book they dislike is used as a comp. I think someone saying they don't like your comps would be as likely as someone not liking chocolate though.
I think your first illustration conveys more of the story as far as setting and would catch someone's eye. The frog with phone, although it shows what is unique about your story, might take a few extra seconds to click in someone's mind. I guess what I'm getting at is that since you can pitch three times, I might suggest pitching barn-frog-barn.
KathrynAdebayo last edited by KathrynAdebayo
Hi, I think your story line is great! I’m interested to read the book and find out what solution they come up with! To pitch your story with more clarity through the pictures, I might add way more crows to the first image (I didn’t notice them at first, even after reading the text.) or change the point of view to make that the focus. The frog image might be enhanced by including a bar on the phone that shows words the frog might mean before sending the text (sorry, don’t know how to describe that well!) or show a jumble of letters instead of eieio. Also, it might be more clear that the frog sent the previous texts if the one from the husband was above one of the texts that the frog sent, but it wasn’t the “eiei” text. These are just conceptual ideas that may or may not be useful, but I hope that your pitch goes well! I’m rooting for your book!
Since you can post about a story three times, you should consider posting at least once with the picture and once without. Agents have methods to block links and sometimes images, too, so all with images might get you blocked from view.
@HeatherBouteneff Hello Heather. What i am remembering from an incredible Storytellers Academy class titled "Submission Ready" is that including comps is super important." including something like "My book is written for children x years old who enjoy, comp title by x author, comp title by x author , and comp title by x author" is what i am remembering. The class was taught by two longtime editors from Chronicle Books. If i remember correctly, including comps shows that you understand the process and will give a hint that you might be easy to work with too. Also Editors have to pitch the books that they are interested in acquiring to other people... so having accurate comps for them is a very good start. I think i recall that including what the affect on the reader is is also something worth including in a pitch. Your pitch sounds awesome! I would read this book for sure!
@Kevin-Longueil I did a local SCBWI conference last month and the agreed upon line on comps was along the lines of: They’re not required, so don’t force them. But if you can nail them – especially with books published in the last 5 years – you’ll really impress the agent(s) because it shows a) you’ve done your homework and b) your book can sell.
@Kevin-Treaccar I forgot about the comps needing to be recent. There were also gentle admonitions to be humble in your comps.. saying that your work will be the next Harry Potter or something of that nature was the example used as something to be avoided.
Hi! I would like to chime in if that’s ok. I kinda can’t decide what image should I go with and since english is not my first language I’m very unsure of how the pitch sounds like? Does it have clear message and are there too many errors? Any feedback would be much appreciated! Thank you so much!
Meet Mike, the magical wish granting cat who can cough up two scooters, a chocolate cake and a cockatoo in one sitting. But, oh no!, something went wrong, the wishes are now stuck in his belly and it’s up to two elderly ladies to take action.
@HeatherBouteneff I love the premise! And personally I feel more connected to the second picture. Since there's a cute character and a phone. But just my opinion.
RachelArmington last edited by RachelArmington
Mag, I love you style and color palette!
You can post three times throughout the day, but need to have a slight variation each time so that Twitter doesn't mark you post as spam...so you could use each picture on different pitches throughout the day, and that would be enough change AND people could see more of your art.
The only suggestion I could see is pretty minor, to add a hyphen between "wish granting" (so that it would be "wish-granting cat").
Good luck! As a cat lover, I would love reading your book!
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RachelArmington last edited by
Mag's pitch is at
My pinned pitch is at
A second tweet if anyone wants to RT:
Greatly appreciated if so.