SEPTEMBER WIP Maybe???Prompt Question
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I have to say that I really liked the black and white version too! That being said, one solution might be to handle the values a bit differently. I tried to keep your same color palette, but warmed it up a bit, tweaked the values of the desk and lunch box/food, and brought some red to the girl so our eye would be drawn to her.
Don't know if it's any better, but I thought it was worth exploring a slightly different value structure.
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Hmm try making the gray rat darker and the other 2 a tiny bit more saturated
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So far I have three votes to keep the black and white and no votes for a colorized version. Maybe its because I had a clear concept for a black and white and no real clear pallet for the other. @TessaW I do like the warmer pallet, but I actually did not want the girl to be the main emphasis. (I know that is the prompt, but in MY story the mice are the central characters. I am just trying to make it work).
@Aleksey Re: "Hmm try making the gray rat darker and the other 2 a tiny bit more saturated"
If only I knew how to do that. I am a novice at PS. Being able to do a multiply layer is a minor miracle for me. I can work wonders with color pencils, okay at painting with acrylic and am improving daily in ink but ask me to pump up the colors in PS and I am like "Uhhh, which button do I push???" -
Ah, I see! If that's the case- I find the girl to be a super strong focal point. The perspective, the tails, the apple stem, and one of the mice are all pointing to her, and she's facing us. (Plus she's just super cute with an amazing expression). If the focus is supposed to be the mice, I think it would read better if she was rendered with less focus, or if she was bigger in the frame and cropped right above the nose. That puts the viewer more in sympathy with the mice-where humans must look quite large to them.
However, looking back to the black and white version, the focus between the mice and the girl are better balanced. I think once you started messing with your value structure, it threw off the balance quite a bit and brought more contrast to the girl. You did bring more contrast to the mice as well, but for some reason the girl still becomes more prominent than in the original version.
Here is a comparison of your original value structure next to both of your color value structures-
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I think it works with or without color! The mice look great and i love the green! I thought that when i saw this on instagram...it really stands out! Nice work!
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@TessaW Wow! I see what you mean. Maybe the girl should be the focal point. Maybe I knew that all along subconsciously, and my instincts guided my hands. I actually like the black and white versions of B and C way better than any other version I created. And I am super impressed with myself for creating this little girl's expression. Somehow I managed to capture exactly the morbid horror/but they're so cute/and I-might-scream-and-run-away-or-I-might-just-let-it-lick-my-hand feeling I was going for. It was one of those everything went according to plan moments that are so few and far between for me. I am very thankful for being able to capture her expression.
@TessaW @Aleksey @demotlj @jakecrowe @KathrynAdebayo @lou Do you think I should stick with the original or go with one of the colored versions? I don't have a lot of time this week but I really want to finally have a competitive piece. I think the composition and story-telling element is there but I am concerned about the rendering. Also EVERYONE does digital and my picture quality is not the best. Even though I am stronger traditionally, I have a hard time getting a good photo of how it looks in life. And... I always manage to have some fatal flaw in my work that puts my work in the middle of the pack rather than making the top ten.
okay...Rant over. I should just be thankful to be learning and growing as an artist and put away my competitive instincts. Here is me eye-rolling at myself. Haha. Thanks for listening!
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@chrisaakins when you said "Somehow I managed to capture exactly the morbid horror/but they're so cute/and I-might-scream-and-run-away-or-I-might-just-let-it-lick-my-hand feeling I was going for." That made my day! I know little girls just like this. Sooooooo funny! Good luck with your piece!
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@juliepeelart haha! It probably comes from being the dad to three girls myself.
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@chrisaakins Did you do what Will does in the class and do several colour studies to find one you like?
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I think you have a really strong piece for the theme this month- but as you've pointed out the presentation could be slightly better. The color could potentially work, but I would simplify the green on the lunch box. You've added additional textures and are trying to get too tricky with the color variation. It's sticking out from everything else. The textures are competing with the charm of the ink work. Color variation can be a good thing, but I think it needs to be reigned in for this case- especially if you don't have a ton of time to work out the problems. Let the lunch box simplify. Maybe go over it will a solid transparent color, letting the ink do the heavy lifting. I also think you need to brighten up the piece slightly overall, it's feeling a little somber to me.
Just my opinion. I'm looking forward to what others have to say.
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The main problem I see with the color is that you have a lot of competing strong saturated colors. I like the mice as a focal point and I would make sure that they are the most saturated colors in your scheme. Iβd move the saturation of the other items more toward the gray, especially the green lunchbox and the red apple β those colors next to each other, especially at a higher saturation, are really puling my attention away from the mice. I did a very quick color study which is too grayed out now but itβs just to show you what I mean.
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@Braden-Hallett no. I wasn't really planning on color. I was going to let the inking be the star. Maybe I should just stick with that idea. @demotlj I agree. I think I need to step away from it a bit and come back to it. Maybe I can get a better picture of the original and that will fix my dissatisfaction with it, because I really do like the original.
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I agree your B&W is the strongest. I think you have a good foundation with that and can now use this time to have fun experimenting with color. Keep posting your experiments here and if you find one that really works that's great! If not you at least have a strong piece without color.
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I really like the B&W values of the color versions. I like them better than the color versions themselves.
My feeling would be to keep with the B&W but really push the values to be stronger. It is easy to do that with ink.
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@chrisaakins said in SEPTEMBER WIP Maybe???Prompt Question:
@Braden-Hallett no. I wasn't really planning on color. I was going to let the inking be the star. Maybe I should just stick with that idea. @demotlj I agree. I think I need to step away from it a bit and come back to it. Maybe I can get a better picture of the original and that will fix my dissatisfaction with it, because I really do like the original.
If you're not happy with it so far colour-wise (and you wanna colour it) copy it, shrink it down, and paste it on a new canvas 6 times or so (so you've got 6 little mini paintings) Use a colour or multiply layer to quickly try out a bunch of colour schemes. I'm willing to bet money you'll
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@jakecrowe Thanks! I really enjoyed your work last month. That was a neat graphic design. Congratulations on the win! I went back and read everyone's initial positive responses to my post (which were some of the best I have gotten so far) and I think I am overthinking it. I just need to let it be a black and white piece. Thanks everyone! @demotlj @Braden-Hallett @TessaW @lou @Aleksey @theprairiefox and everyone else who commented!
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"and I think I am overthinking it. I just need to let it be a black and white piece. Thanks everyone! @demotlj @Braden-Hallett @TessaW @lou @Aleksey @theprairiefox and everyone else who commented!"
Note I just noticed this last post of yours, but I still wanted to chime in.
Hey. So I too prefer the black and white but I do really like the additional subtle colours in the white mouse. The green is distracting. If you returned to the black and white and added subtle colour details to the white mouse (as you have in this one) and add subtle colours to the other two grey ones (not some much yellow -similar to the feel of the white mouse), I think those changes would give it the little boost.