Now better sketch finished:
Process on work for my portfolio (ongoing)
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@hannahmccaffery Thank You Hannah, really appreciate your help with the text. I will change it.
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@hannahmccaffery What about this?:
„Ohhh, ohhh you know this one?“
Flip din‘t wait for the bear to answer and started to tell its joke:
„Why don't bears like fast food?“Berry started to think, but before he could answer...
„Because they can't catch it!“ -
@MichaelaH That's flows much better in my opinion
You may want to lose the line "Flip didn't wait etc" and maybe have something like:
"Ohhh, ohhh do you know this one?" Flip asked "Why don't bears like fast food?"
Berry started to think, but before he could answer-
"Because they can't catch it!" Flip blurted out as he splashed around in a fit of giggles.That's only an idea anyway, I'm not the best at writing so it's totally what you're happy with and what you think flows well
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Fab! Are you happy with it as that's the important thing?
I think the text gives Flip more of personality now and I would love to see more of these characters
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@hannahmccaffery I am very happy with it, thank You so much. Yeah I am thinking about drawing one more picture to this story
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@MichaelaH oh yeah much better puts you right into the scene
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@MichaelaH P.S. Your signature is so perfect for the children’s book market
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@BichonBistro Thank You, I love mouse so
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@MichaelaH I will always love your imaginative animals best but your humans are fabulous too!
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@BichonBistro Thank You so much for liking my work