Process on work for my portfolio (ongoing)

16 Jul 2019, 12:08

This looks great Michaela, i was looking forward to seeing this finished yay!
As for the text, I don't think you need to say 'the fish with the red fins' as we can see from your illustration that he has red fins
Maybe give them names like Little Fish and Big Bear or something, and I think there should be a pause between when the fish asks the question and then tells the punchline, maybe say something like "Bear started to think, but before he could answer..." so that the Bear is involved and the reader can follow the conversation between the two characters

MichaelaH · 16 Jul 2019, 12:14

@hannahmccaffery Thank You Hannah, really appreciate your help with the text. I will change it.

MichaelaH · 16 Jul 2019, 12:22

@hannahmccaffery What about this?:

„Ohhh, ohhh you know this one?“

Flip din‘t wait for the bear to answer and started to tell its joke:
„Why don't bears like fast food?“

Berry started to think, but before he could answer...
„Because they can't catch it!“

16 Jul 2019, 12:54

@MichaelaH That's flows much better in my opinion You may want to lose the line "Flip didn't wait etc" and maybe have something like:

"Ohhh, ohhh do you know this one?" Flip asked "Why don't bears like fast food?"

Berry started to think, but before he could answer-
"Because they can't catch it!" Flip blurted out as he splashed around in a fit of giggles.

That's only an idea anyway, I'm not the best at writing so it's totally what you're happy with and what you think flows well

MichaelaH · 16 Jul 2019, 15:02

@hannahmccaffery Thank You, hope it is ok, I will use Your text, I like it a lot. Thank You for your help.

16 Jul 2019, 15:41

Fab! Are you happy with it as that's the important thing? I think the text gives Flip more of personality now and I would love to see more of these characters

MichaelaH · 16 Jul 2019, 16:01

@hannahmccaffery I am very happy with it, thank You so much. Yeah I am thinking about drawing one more picture to this story

MichaelaH · 18 Jul 2019, 12:42

Working on July contest, have two thumbnails

Thumbnail A

Thumbnail B

MichaelaH · 18 Jul 2019, 21:23

Now better sketch finished:

MichaelaH · 21 Jul 2019, 21:03

Between work for fun - challange #aggressivesloth by @jimbobdrawingshow on instagram.
Hyrax taking its time eating leaves in the mean time sloth is going slowly in aggressive mode

MichaelaH · 23 Jul 2019, 10:40

I am as @Aleksey patreon from mitchleeuwe and he gave me feedback to try my composition to show from lower angle. Here than two rough sketches in comparison.