I'd love some critical feedback
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@Robyn-Hepburn I am glad it is helpful! Also just my personal opinion, I really like the wolves I think they look cute!
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@MerryMary Haha! Thanks, I'm glad you like them.
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@Robyn-Hepburn I really like the shapes, especially of the wolves!
The only thing that stood out to me upon first read was that the ice is so light, it almost looked like a break in the illustration until I looked a bit longer. Perhaps the ice could come down a little in value and maybe the grass could come up a bit?
I understand you’re trying to show the range of seasons; perhaps a gradient-esque approach would help to blend these contrasting elements into one image? I’m mostly brainstorming here.I really like the style though - would peek into this book off the shelf for sure.
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@Robyn-Hepburn just to better communicate the above suggestions, I did a quick paint over. I lowered the value of the top of the ice, lightened the grass right above the ice and addd a bit of stroke shading to the text so it wouldn’t be washed out by my changes.
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@skeletortoise wow! That gives it so much depth! Thank you. That's something I don't think would have occurred to me to do. And thanks for the kind words. I'm planning to do some more illustrations for the book so maybe you will see "inside" soon.
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@Robyn-Hepburn would love to see definitely!
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@Robyn-Hepburn said in I'd love some critical feedback:
Indeed, they don't look much like wolves, but what to do when you don't want to make them too realistic...
You can keep the same style & give them more wolf like characteristics by making them stockier. If you make the end of the muzzle a line instead of a point, I think that would help a lot in showing that it's not a fox. I would also make the neck thicker & make them bigger overall.
I would also choose gray colors for their fur (even though wolves do come in a range of colors—or colours, since these are English wolves.
)Even if you change just a couple of characteristics, I think it would do the job. (For example, I have seen drawings with a pointy nose & it still looks like a wolf, because it was large, had wider-set eyes, and thick fur & neck.)
You could try tracing just the outline of a wolf photo or drawing, and see what you notice.
Ask yourself, "What is the difference between a fox & a wolf?" and use those traits.
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@Robyn-Hepburn said in I'd love some critical feedback:
all the wolves can be peeking from behind tree trunks instead!
I think that would look great!
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@Robyn-Hepburn Really cute image.
Something that sticks out right away to me is the feeling of being confined to a single color palette. The two girls having the exact same colors in their outfits reads a little odd to me. They compete for attention on the page and confuse the eye a bit especially where you've just swapped the green and blue on the tights.
I can definitely see that you've done this traditionally and then patched things together digitally, and while I do think there's a way to do that in a way that is seamless, I don't think you're quite there yet. For example in this image there are some issues with edge control and tangents:
The skate meeting the grass almost exactly on it's point is a distracting tangent.I'd also like to see you ground these characters a bit more. Right now they are just sort of floating. Maybe try adding a shadow.
Another thing that I find a bit confusing is the light colored vegetation in the front, which gives me the idea that we are in a tropical place with flowers and palm-like plants, but then we are suddenly ice skating on a frozen river. The two of them cause confusion rather than clarity.
If I were you here's what I'd do:
Ask myself: what am I trying to achieve with this image?
What is the story I'm trying to tell?
Where is it set? What time of day is it (there's some confusing things happening with the lighting as well)?
Am I confined to a color palette? Why am I choosing these colors? How can color work to help me tell the story and this scene?
What's happening in this scene? The front girl is falling but the one behind her is skating smoothly, which doesn't quite track... usually if the person in front of you is falling and you're holding their hand, they'll knock you off your balance too.I'm sorry I know that's a lot to read, but I've made a lot of images which are more confusing than clear and I think it helps to have someone remind you the necessity of asking yourself these questions.
But keep going! Try reworking this and see what you can come up with!
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@Kristen-Lango Hi, Thank you!
Yup, I have been working on it...endlessly...but I'm finding this a really great piece for lots of trial and error. In fact, I'm even considering changing it into an internal illustration and then being able to make the cover more figurative. That way this one can be more literal, without the many-seasons and tree-wolves.The colour palette thing is a very good point... I love using many colours, or variations on a bunch of colours, but then I feel like I have to hold myself back and limit it because that's what so many illustrators say to do. So it's really helpful to know what your reaction was to those limited colours on the girls' clothes.
Right, I'll keep going...
