Yep, no white lines needed for this one. I love how it turned out. The coloring of the tail totally give the huge clue about the mermaid! I just had to be patient. And his expression is perfect. I think you hit the nail on the head with all your words or story points with this! The no fishing sign is too much of a focal point l. I agree with the rest of the crew. Great job!
It isn't just the actual measurement of each, it is their visual weight. Visually the cowboy and the sign feel the same weight to me. Enlarging the font of the title and changing it's background color may change the visual weight. Also making the cowboy a bit smaller would help in multiple ways: it would move him away from the edge, give the author and illustrator text more room, and create size variance but still keep him in front of the sign.
I get what you are saying now--I'll play around with it!
@heather-boyd Ooo I love that advice, Heather! I'm wondering if "uncertain" it's a little different than what I'm trying to achieve for her though... I'm wanting the female character to appear carefree and in control, and the gentleman behind her to be more menacing (possibly curious? I'm going back and forth on how I want him to end up at this point).
As this has developed, I'm reminded of the story of Muses. Maybe this gentleman has stumbled upon his muse and he's about to take some furious notes? Maybe he intends to capture her. Thus me going back and forth on him, and his just general "crouching" pose haha
Here's another update! I'm going to double check her twisty legs...
Thank you All, @chrisaakins, @Whitney-Simms, @Art-of-B, @TianLian, @lmrush, @cam-royce, @djlambson
I appreciate your generous response. I've been crazy busy the last week, but I hope to do more art soon! thank you again --- Cheer's
This is a great piece and I love your rendering, as always. I don't know if you are finished with the girl but right now, I had to look at her twice to realize that the harp strings weren't her hair. Will her left arm be behind the harp holding it? That might clarify it. Other than that, amazing work.
I don't know what I'm talking about, I'm not a professional or even a great artist but there are certain things that show hints of Photoshop. The most obvious one is when you can see individual brushstrokes and you recognize the basic round brush.. Maybe the settings have been fiddled with, some texture added, opacity lowered.. But it still doesnt hide that the mark was made by a basic round brush.. Especially when there are 3 parallel strokes like I this detail:
To take it to the next level maybe try experimenting with different brush shapes, or work in more detail with a smaller brush to get rid of the round brush shapes.
Again, take all this with a grain of salt because I probably have no idea what I'm talking about.
@TessaW I agree with the mushiness and I think I am okay with it. In the immortal words of @Jake-Parker I just need to finish it. I will not make it perfect. That being said, I am very pleased with the seated arrangement I put in the finished work. I am posting it tonight. Feel free to go and take a look.
Thanks to all who gave me input! I really learned a ton going through this process. You made this more of a team effort and I am encouraged to keep on going. Maybe actually finish writing the second book and maybe even make it a graphic novel.
I am in love with the designs of your mushroom people - I think the idea of putting their face at the very base of the shroom with these big floppy heads/foreheads is adorable and funny and something I haven't seen before.
My critique is in a place where I'm just starting to learn from - but it looks like with your comp that you could benefit from finding the big shapes forms and doing value on those. Your woman has a lot of different values in her which makes it hard for her to stand out - but maybe if her value and the cat and the mushroom people can all be of a lighter value, where the whole middle ground is the darkness of that grass. This would allow her to pop out more and be the true focus.