Art Critique : help needed :-)



  • Hey all,

    as I want to start creating more actual pieces (I've been sketching a lot since I started, but no "real" creation), I was hoping that you guys could give me some feedback on my work and maybe some advice on how to improve.

    I guess there is A LOT to work on, but any new look on my art is valuable, so I'll take it. πŸ™‚

    Here is the first one:
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    Thanks!



  • @Moose-Otakool that’s looking really good for a sketch. Is there a story behind it or is it more of random sketch book doodle



  • @peteolczyk There is no actual meaning, but I do want to add more storytelling to my art... Not sure how, yet.



  • @Moose-Otakool I like that type of drawing, it’s full of possibilities. Maybe a little story will grow around it.
    I like your line art too, especially around the main characters face



  • First off, let me encourage you and say I'm digging your style. You've got good linework with good variation of light and heavy lines helping your scene (especially your guy) read really well. Additionally your ink wash (it is ink right?) for your character reads really well. I think you lose a little of that readability with the monster looking guy on the left since it's mostly flat coloring.

    Though, it sounds you may be more interested in getting into the story telling side of things. I would look at Alfredo CΓ‘ceres (you can find him on Instagram @redolaf). Your style reminded me of his in some ways.

    I've pulled a few images of his, especially from his Inktober posts. When it comes to telling stories, think about how each element feeds into the message you want to say. Remember, art is just another form of communication.

    This is his Bait prompt from Inktober.

    Bait Prompt - Redolaf Instagram

    You can ask yourself questions. Who is doing the baiting? Who is getting baited? How are they getting baited? Why are they getting baited. With this piece, the wolf baits the human by their own greed.

    All the elements feed this narrative. The wolf is know for hunting. Money is often a symbol of greed. The stick under a box is a common trope of a trap. The house as the trap box is interesting, either because it represents how we often look at others who have nicer things than us with envy, or that we often become trapped in life by our own material greed.

    Sling Prompt - Redolaf Instagram

    This one is also really clear. And adventure (based on his hat and backpack) his holding a picture of the moon and looking up towards the stars (looking like that's where he wants to be) He sits on a house attached to a slingshot, which means he is on his way to the stars!

    Each element serves the core message.

    This is the series of questions I try to ask myself:

    • What is the core message I want to tell?
    • How does each piece in the illustration serve / reinforce that narrative?
    • What is the focal point of the image?
    • What do I want the audience to feel when looking at the image?

    Don't sell yourself short - you've got style! Just start thinking about the story and message you want to share. Keep up the good work!


  • Moderator

    @Moose-Otakool Take Lee White’s Visual Storytelling Techniques class on SVS. It will help you A LOT in the storytelling area. πŸ‘



  • @Mason-Cardiff-0 Wow! That's very detailled feedback, and I totally get what you mean with the examples. 🌟🌟🌟 That means the story needs to come first? Should I write things down?

    @burvantill I'm considering taking a subscription (that's why I'm here 😊). I'll have a look at that one first, then.

    Thanks guys! πŸ‘πŸΏ



  • Here is another piece of mine. πŸ™‚

    I don't know what the rules are, and if I should create another topic to get some feedback on my drawings. So in the meantime, I'll just leave it here.

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    I did it before getting all the feedback regarding story telling, so I'll think about it more for my next drawing. πŸ™‚


  • SVS OG

    @Moose-Otakool hi! I think both of your illustrations look amazing as is. Great job! What industry/field do you want to get into?



  • @Nyrryl-Cadiz Wow! I'm very flattered! 😁 Actually, I'm just considering improving my art for now as I already have a job that I love.

    My goal is basically to be able to create characters and stories they can be part of.

    I'm just in phase one of the plan, and hope to be able to achieve both of them thanks to the SVS people. 😁

    Edit: BTW, just took a look at your art on your website, and I love how bright and colourful it is! Very inspiring! 🌟🌟🌟


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