Slowvember WIP (book spread)
@theprairiefox thank you for the feedback, super helpful!
Agree with you, the glasses are a little distracting, maybe they can be resting on his head on just in a normal position, I'll try out a couple options.
I had also thought at some point that one plant growing into the other could be kind of weird, the fact that you see it too gives me a clear direction!
Regarding the house, do you mean the window of the last one near the tree or the edge of the one in front (or potentially both, now that I think about it...)?
Good luck to you too! My current mindset is: even if I don't finish by the end of the month, better to stay true to the spirit of Slowvember, go slow and get the most out of it
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@Elena-Marengoni Yeah, the window and the roof in front of it. Just not quite on or off the page...
@theprairiefox gotcha, will fix it!
Hi Elena! I really like your layouts, and especially the one of the boy in bed when the plant starts to grow. It has a really nice value range and design. I also like how you have four narrow panels in a row showing the plant's progress. Prairie Fox made good points, but you are addressing those. I can't wait to see how this turns out! Good luck finishing and enjoy your sabbatical!
P.S. Ho letto che abiti a Milano. Sono abbastanza vicina--Torino!
@LauraA thank you! such a small world (vorrà dire che magari capiterà di incontrarci!! )
Haven't fixed the drawings yet (I will do I once I get ready to paint the final in traditional media) but since they weren't big changes, I thought I would go ahead and do values and color studies, trying to make the illustrations part of the same world yet different. Note: color fills are not always super precise cause I had to work with my trackpad (waiting for a new cable for my tablet) but hopefully you'll get the idea
Heather Boyd last edited by Heather Boyd
I was thinking lighting up that plant when I first read it just now. Two/three suggestions for the plant (whether you considered them already):
- have the plant green (silly to suggest I know)
- within the glow establish a growth system, i.e. seeing it pulsating or pumping energy/ moving up (get creative)
- have the plant turn slowly to the white of the moon on the top portions -> to push a story like this plant grows fast and large during the full moon and maybe shrinks down once it's over or dies, reminds me of the phoenix or it's really from the moon and somehow fell to the earth, or even lives in the moon (that's doctor who inspired). I am having fun. I got to get back to Braden's writing stories thread. @Braden-Hallett
Only small tangent I see is in the second kitchen work where the small offshoot is lining up with the vertical line of the cupboard.
@Elena-Marengoni I like the fact that, although the plant is growing, it's actually getting smaller in each of the panes, because it's bursting through more and more rooms. They look elegant as a series. I also like the color comps. I see the point about the plant being green, but your color schemes are subtle and besides, the white make it look glowing and magical. But that tree in the background of the fourth panel is a little different, not only in color, but in form, and it leaves a question in my mind. Is it an ordinary tree, or does it bear some relation to the magic plant?
The small sprout to the left on the second panel looks like it's about to touch the edge. I'd either make it touch, or pull it back away from the edge. I'm really curious to see what your traditional media version looks like!
P.S. Sarebbe bello se ci incontrassimo! Non vengo spesso a Milano, ma magari mi serve solo una scusa
Jeremy Ross last edited by Jeremy Ross
@Elena-Marengoni, these look pretty cool! Agree with other input already stated; however, also noticed in the 2nd panel the plant stem looks like the cat’s tail.
You might consider moving the cat between the plant.
Also, the attic kinda looked like a bedroom because the dresser, but then I noticed the spiderweb. Maybe replace the dresser with storage boxes?
Great work nonetheless!