Quick feedback on the construction,
IgorWoznicki last edited by IgorWoznicki
I felt a bit rusty ( work has been keeping me bussy lately) and didn't get to draw much in past few weeks so I thought that I will focus really hard on construction on my next piece to dust off and I wanna drop it here and ask for some feedback before I move on!
Does the construction and the pose itself make sense? Is forshortening fine? I wanna add a bit of it here, although I don't intent to make it too pronounced. What could I do to add some more life to it?
I had extra hard time with his left arm ( I usually don't struggle with hands that much! ) so any advice on how to make it look better would be appreciated as well. I know it's all wrong here!
It's simple and lifeless at the moment, it's just cylinders and spheres after all, but I wanna nail that phase of this drawing and make it as good as I possibly can!
Heather Boyd last edited by Heather Boyd
I don't find it lifeless at all! I may not know exactly what your character is doing but even how you have put him together already shows me some defining features (tall, lanky, those ears I love). Construction wise with characters not my strong point -yet lols. The left back leg gets a little lost for me -it also looks a lot slimmer and longer than the right leg. But I really appreciate seeing how you draw step by step the frame -it's encouraging and will help me as I draw characters in the near ish future.
@Heather-Boyd Oh yeah, I guess I should have mentioned my intention with this pose since it may look very unclear.
Basically, the guy is a vampire, the flask he is holding contains blood and he just took a sip and wiped his mouth with his arm like we sometimes do, hence he holds one of his hands like this and near the face. I am gonna hint it with some blood left on his arm and face once I push this further
Thanks for this quick feedback as well! I wanted his legs to be long and slenderlike and I didn't notice his right leg appears shorter and thicker. Gonna tweak this one for sure
Justin Moss last edited by
I'd agree with @Heather-Boyd. The arm wiping his mouth looks good. Nice job on the hands as well. Excited to see this piece progress!
Ah, I envy your ability to see and manage shapes! Love the smooth line that's flowing through your entire pose, too! I like the idea of him wiping his mouth after drinking blood. Maybe have him actually in the process of wiping his mouth like this?:
And maybe even have the flask in the same hand that he's wiping his mouth with to make the connection even clearer. Although I wouldn't know what to do with his other hand then, other than hold the cap, lol. The only other thing I'll mention is the hand holding the flask. The arm line seems to connect with the line for the bottom of the flask, and if anything, Will Terry has taught me to avoid tangential lines like this :D. Just giving my two cents!
Great work and thank you for sharing! I can't wait to see the finished product!
Whoa, thanks guys! Never expected to get a positive response here
That's so heartwarming!
@aprilshin uggh, can't believe I've missed such an obvious tangent!
Thanks, good eye here! As for the arm's pose, I thought of that at first but it would cover my expression and I want to show some kind of supriese or embarassement on his face. Like he was caught doing something wrong. Thanks for the suggestion though! Those are always welcome
Maxi Silva last edited by
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I really love the "line of action" of the drawing. Just a question, is he standing on his tiptoes? or is he floating?
I'm only a beginner, but I see so much life in your constructions. The lines are really dynamic and it conveys a lot of movement. Love it!
Ugh, I really need to leave ya all with more information next time!
Yes, @Maxi-Silva, the guy is floating
Gonna indicate that by showing a proper cast shadow underneath his feet.
Oh, and thanks, @ShannonBiondi! I am really glad someone likes it at this stage
animatosoor last edited by
@IgorWoznicki I agree with everyone else who's said that your construction looks lively and well-structured. It makes me want to see what it would look like after the details have been added.
I also like @aprilshin's suggestion for the placement of the hand - I feel like that change would further enhance your pose.
NelsonYiap last edited by
This is really solid (no pun intended hehe). Perhaps the only thing I could see is the bended right thigh seems to have the same length as the straight left thigh behind it. It's really not a big deal though. There's plenty of gesture and 3D-ness so I think it's going to look great!
IgorWoznicki last edited by IgorWoznicki
Again, thank you all so much for positive reactions and some feedback!
I pushed the artwork further today and I intent on finishing it tomorrow, thought I will giva ya all on update!
You guys have done enough already but I dare to ask ya' all for some more feedback on this guy ( I quite like him, although I didn't at first! ).
As for what I've changed, made some slight adjustments to the leg that appeared too thick and moved his arm a bit closer to the face to further exaggerate the wiping his mouth thing. I still don't want to cover his face and expression, so I don't know If I want to push that even further.
I am unsure about the hair I wanna go for. I think I like the flame hair the most but the bald one looks more like nosferatu hence more like a vampire...Ahh, I dunno, you can tell me your favourite!
Besides that, I am not sure about the perspective and construction of the bottle. I am also thinking about replacing the hip-flask with a bottle similar to the one he carries on the back. Also, I've lost the dimensionality of his right arm, I believe.
The clothing may change a bit as I go so if ya got some ideas, suggestions or pointers to make in that case, feel free to do so!
djly last edited by
I love the character and the pose. The line work is looking really nice as well.
I think it was mentioned already, and you mention it in your last post, but I do think having the arm a bit higher would help. It is a bit difficult to read here that he is swiping his mouth. Maybe you could also have a bit of blood dribbling onto his coat?
As far as hair, I like the first as I think it helps with balance composition.
I hope this helps!
@IgorWoznicki Omg I'm in love with the tattered clothing texture and the huge bottle on his back! For the right arm, I think if you reverse the direction the folds are going and bring his elbow out a little more, it may help bringing it forward.
Honestly I don't even know if that's any better, haha. For the hair, I do like the fire hair, but maybe it could be blowing in the wind like the hair on the left? Basically a combination of the two.
I love this character, by the way! And I hope you create a comic/cartoon/anything with him because I'd love to know his story.
MichaelaH last edited by MichaelaH
@IgorWoznicki I would change the belts which holds the bottle, over breast like x would be ok for the bottle now, or if you like to have only belt in waist, ... forget it, I didn‘t see the breast belt...
Though I will share the final result with ya guys
Thanks for all the help ( I didn't change all that much but it's still better than nothing! ) and encouragement! I am not the biggest fan of this one, it's definitely not at the top of my game and I felt like discarding it but all the nice comments made it much easier to push through it.
Ultimately, I kinda like the bottle which is funny because this sketch got createad after "I feel like drawing a bottle" thought popped into my head
Feel free to leave some extra feedback If you see something worth improving. I'd love to hear some more thoughts!
Oh! And @aprilshin, there is no comic/animation coming (unfortunately) but I can give ya my idea for the character! He's basically a vampire who used to be royalty (hence more elegant clothes) but he has escaped his birthplace after he was bit and now he just kinda strolls around the world, carrying a big blood supply in case he runs our of it during his journey. Nothing impressive, really!
animatosoor last edited by
This looks really good, @IgorWoznicki! The character himself, the bottle, the rendering, the composition - everything works, in my opinion. Nicely done.
@IgorWoznicki This is so awesome! Love all the details and I especially love the character's backstory! Thanks so much for sharing this with us!