@Lee-White - I didn't submit to the April contest but greatly appreciate the feedback you provided the other artists, as it really helped me develop a criteria for my own work. I always appreciate the extra time you take to mentor, thank you!
Posts made by djly
RE: APRIL PROMPT "THE MOMENT BEFORE"
RE: Celebrating the baby steps (of my art journey)
Congratulations! You do beautiful work and great to see it being shared with the world.
RE: The Moment Before My Mom Left WIP
@Squirrelsize - the small details like including the warm embrace from your mother and the flowers on the bed are just lovely. I'm really loving the middle/most recent version. I think zooming-in was a really good choice and brings in the best of all versions.
RE: Critique needed- Night Cat
I really love this image and the progress is really wonderful to see between your first post to the most recent!
For the shadow, I wonder if it might be nice to add a bit more movement or shape corresponding to the cat. I did a quick google search and found this image for reference:
RE: The moment before - April WIP
I prefer the most recent version as well. You are getting a more dynamic composition by changing it to this angle.
I do agree with @MichaelaH about the size of the mice. Or it seems to me that the hole has some unused space that you could either show maybe the foreground of the cave or add a bit more interest so that it isn't completely black.
RE: Does this comic page work in black and white
I always love your art style and the style shown in the comic is no different, really nice work and expressions!
I think the main thing I'm seeing is perhaps not enough delineation between the foreground and background. In the first panel, for example, with the hand holding the gerbil it might be nice to have a bit bolder line work on the gerbil (or the line work, as is) and then a slightly thinner line work on the hand. Right now it is a bit difficult for me to read them as two separate objects.
I hope this helps!
RE: Park scene for local magazine
The redraw with the playground equipment and park benches adds some extra whimsy that is very nice. The sketches of the birds thus far are also looking good. The eyeballs on the top of the head may help to maneuver the issue of the all black head you were worried about in your first post.