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    • lisanganart
      lisanganart last edited by

      Hello everyone,
      May I ask for critiques regarding the composition?
      This is the ending to a children's book story. The scarf is a gift from the rabbit to the pig. They are BFFs. THis is a evening snow scene.
      I am trying to capture a sweet moment of a heartwarming friendship.Pig and bunny marshmallow outline2.jpg
      Thank you so much!
      Lisa

      https://www.instagram.com/lisanganart/

      Lisa
      https://www.instagram.com/lisanganart/

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      • Erin.Cortese
        Erin.Cortese Moderator @lisanganart last edited by

        @lisanganart The composition is very cute and heartwarming. I do see a couple of tangents, one between the pig’s Pom Pom and the tree, and one with the branch touching the edge of the page. The perspective of the window on the house is slightly off on the right side.

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        • lisanganart
          lisanganart @Erin.Cortese last edited by

          @inkandspatter Thank you! You are right. I'll fix them.

          Lisa
          https://www.instagram.com/lisanganart/

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          • ArtofAleksey
            ArtofAleksey last edited by

            I think the hat is a bit distracting because it's unique looking with the 2 floofs But nothing else looks out of place in the same way so it draws a lot of attention. I also am not sure if you need the foot prints in the snow, they dont feel like they are adding anything for me, are you trying to show they are neighbors and the little one came over to hang out with the piggy?

            instagram and twitter: @artofaleksey
            alekseyillustration.com

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            • lisanganart
              lisanganart @ArtofAleksey last edited by

              @Aleksey Thank you! I'll fix the pom pom...maybe smaller or reduce to one works better. I just thought footprints should be there since they have to walk to the fireplace. I'll take note of that and make them more subtle in the color phase. Thanks so mcuh!

              Lisa
              https://www.instagram.com/lisanganart/

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              • ArtofAleksey
                ArtofAleksey @lisanganart last edited by

                @lisanganart yeah no problem! This is very cute

                instagram and twitter: @artofaleksey
                alekseyillustration.com

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