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      Lisa Ngan last edited by

      This is a rough draft from a picture book story. The child's family is moving from the city to the suburbs and she is sad to leave. Please comment on the composition and the color choices. Thank you so much! !0_1527878429860_By the Window Sketch2.jpg 0_1527878436957_By the Window Color Draft2.jpg

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        Chip Valecek SVS Team SVS OG @Lisa Ngan last edited by

        @lisa-ngan great start. I would remove the table in the lower left. Where it is now, there is no where to walk. I think not having it there would be fine. Maybe add a tear drop on the girls check, just one.


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          Lisa Ngan @Chip Valecek last edited by

          @chip-valecek Okay thank you!

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            Heather Boyd last edited by

            I agree it looks a bit crowded. I am having trouble understanding the city light background, perhaps more variety in size and shape of buildings and without a very visible distinction between the different layers of the city background. And lastly her seat looks slanted towards us, dipping into the foreground. However I love the many starry lights on the city, it can be overpowering at times, but it can be mesmerising as well.

            I like to see the end work.

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              Lisa Ngan @Heather Boyd last edited by

              @heather-boyd Thank you for your critique!

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