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    • Joy Heyer
      Joy Heyer last edited by

      Here is another illustration I'm working on for my portfolio review. All suggestions are appreciated! gingerbread10.15.15.jpg

      Twitter: @Joy_Illustrated
      Instagram: joy_illustrated
      Website: joyheyer.com

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      • Rich Green
        Rich Green SVS OG @Joy Heyer last edited by

        @Joy-Heyer Hi Joy! Another very cute illustrated scene from you! Love all the detail in the old fashioned stove and how well you captured the look/texture of the hardwood flooring as well!

        The only thing I would suggest is making the two pictures on the wall a little less white/bright. I think they are competing for attention in the scene when they are just background props. So toning them down a bit would help them fall more into their place in the background.

        Otherwise - very nicely done once again!

        www.richgreenart.com instagram.com/richgreenart/

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        • Lee White
          Lee White SVS Team SVS Instructor Pro SVS OG last edited by

          really charming piece Joy. Your drawing skill really stands out. I have a couple of suggestions for the overall piece.

          The overall composition is suffering by all the action being right in the center. See how this works out. Look at all the unused space around the action that isn't really doing much for the composition (and storytelling). 1444953870765-gingerbread10.15.15.jpg

          So here's a quick fix. Move the gingerbread man over to the right side of the image which adds a sense of urgency to the picture. He's about to escape! And that will track the viewers eye to from the stove to him which covers a larger area. I also darkened him to stand out a bit and cropped in on the overall picture a little. Lastly, I darkened some of the background like Rich suggested which I think is a good call.

          Overall a very lovely piece! Keep it up! : ) 1444953870765-gingerbread10.15.152.jpg

          SVS Faculty Instructor
          www.leewhiteillustration.com

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          • Ace Connell
            Ace Connell @Lee White last edited by

            @Lee-White Your insights are always great to read!

            Ace

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            • Lee White
              Lee White SVS Team SVS Instructor Pro SVS OG last edited by

              Thanks Ace! It's so fun to see the work you guys are doing. You all inspire me daily!

              SVS Faculty Instructor
              www.leewhiteillustration.com

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              • Joy Heyer
                Joy Heyer last edited by

                Thanks @Rich-Green! Your suggestions are always so helpful! I will darken the background.

                @Lee-White, Thank you also! Moving the gingerbread boy definitely creates more drama. Quick question: If I crop, will the lines of the stove create distracting tangents/near tangents? Do I need to rethink the stove?

                Twitter: @Joy_Illustrated
                Instagram: joy_illustrated
                Website: joyheyer.com

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                • Lee White
                  Lee White SVS Team SVS Instructor Pro SVS OG last edited by

                  perthaps, but only if it bothers you. I would be fine with how it is now.

                  SVS Faculty Instructor
                  www.leewhiteillustration.com

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