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    • Jana
      Jana last edited by

      Hi, guys!
      May I introduce... this is Bernadett. She is supposed to be a character in a fairy tale I am thinking about. She is the best friend of the donkey, who is the main character.
      I am wondering if this needs more detail. If I compare my piece with an image by Mary Blair, which is also more or less flat, than I see that she used some lines and light reflections. I will copy her image here for comparison. What do you think?
      0_1485084968310_Bernadett 1 SVS.png
      0_1485084986311_Bernadett 2 SVS.png
      Here the Mary Blair piece:
      0_1485085056585_Mary Blair 4.jpg

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      • Jana
        Jana last edited by

        I noticed that I should use another texture next time. When I compare with Charlie Eve's (@Charlie-Eve-Ryan) work, she is so much more encouraged to use really strong textures. It is so beautiful, what she is doing. 🙂
        Here is Bernadett in action...
        0_1485104158901_Bernadett 3 SVS.png

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        • Jana
          Jana last edited by

          Ooops... forget the little feathers on her head. Here it is...
          0_1485104477526_Bernadett 3 SVS.png

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          • Jana
            Jana last edited by

            Maybe I should give her the second wing?
            0_1485105688536_Bernadett 3 SVS.png

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            • lmrush
              lmrush Pro SVS OG @Jana last edited by

              @Jana I like the second wing 🙂

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              • drawingmelee
                drawingmelee @Jana last edited by

                @Jana That second wing helps, yes. 🙂

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                • anthemsweet
                  anthemsweet @Jana last edited by

                  @Jana The Mary Blair piece has simplified shapes and lines--but it does have a feeling of depth, as well. What if you put your bird in a tree in a setting with a night sky like Mary Blair's, and gave your leaves different tones to create depth?.

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                  • Jana
                    Jana @anthemsweet last edited by

                    @anthemsweet Thank you! That is a good idea. I will definitely try that soon. 🙂

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                    • MirkaH
                      MirkaH last edited by

                      Hi, I think it is a cute bird, but feels very static. Mary Blairs work is simplified forms, but since they are hand drawn more irregular. And the brush strokes you are using, I'd make them go with the shapes as if painted in, instead of across all areas.

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                      • Jana
                        Jana last edited by

                        @mirkaH Thank you for your feedback, Mirka. 🙂
                        I was already experimenting with some different textures and strokes, but wasn't really happy with it. I will go on trying to bring some more life to it. Hope I can share something soon.

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                        • Jana
                          Jana last edited by

                          What do you think? Does that bring some more life into Bernadette?
                          It is far away from being decent. Still experimenting...
                          0_1485465034832_Bernadett 5 SVS.png

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                          • Jana
                            Jana last edited by

                            It seems poor Bernadette always looses some parts, first the wing, now the tail. Next time she will get it back... 😉

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                            • Charlie Eve Ryan
                              Charlie Eve Ryan Pro SVS OG @Jana last edited by Charlie Eve Ryan

                              @Jana Thanks for the compliments! I do love texture and I love the subtle texture and character design in your earlier posts. I think this last guy is a super cutie, but the background is falling a bit flat even with the added texture/color. I really love the simplicity of the earlier pieces.

                              If you want to play more with backdrops notice how Mary Blair is still letting part of the character pop off the page against a partially white background with strong darks to lights. She is also using brushes with lots of texture in the strokes, which I see you are starting to do. Maybe try to push the darks and try not to lose the white space.

                              I think you are on to a very fun, beautiful style here!! Keep going!

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                              • Jana
                                Jana @Charlie Eve Ryan last edited by

                                @Charlie-Eve-Ryan Thank you so much for your feedback! 🙂 That really motivates me to push further in this direction.
                                I was wondering if I overdid the robin with the light and shadow. In fact I wanted to keep it as simple as possible without being too flat. I guess I will go back one step with the robin to fit it more to the tree style.
                                Actually, I love white backgrounds. I am relieved that you encouraged me to bring some white areas back. 🙂

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                                • Jana
                                  Jana last edited by

                                  More experiments. I tried to bring back white and also some tiny black contrasts. What do you think? Is the style of the different objects consistent enough?
                                  0_1485544548434_Bernadett 4 SVS.png

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                                  • MirkaH
                                    MirkaH @Jana last edited by

                                    @Jana I think it's still too stiff, the shapes are even rounds, and the wings are the same. I'd still work on making it a little more of an organic shape. The bush strokes look a lot nicer on this one. 🙂

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