14 Jul 2023, 17:23
Here's the updated sketch. The books need to be fixed what else?
Help with lily pad placement, please?
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@MiaNova thanks so much!!!
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@ksfabian Is there anything in particular you think is off? I don’t see any big perspective issues. Is this more of a compositional problem?
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@skeletortoise it’s the cluster of lily pads and duck that are crammed together. Also the teapot and cup.
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@ksfabian Fun concept! Would you be open to feedback that's not related to the lily pads?
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@Mia-Clarke absolutely! I’m sketching digitally but plan to transfer it to watercolor paper and paint it traditionally so any fixes are welcome
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more changes but I’m now thinking the shelves are off. -
@ksfabian
For me, the most important thing to fix about the piece is the perspective. Consider the shelves, where this is very clear. You would not be able to see the tops of them from your camera position, and they should be vanishing downwards into the image rather than up. Another thing is that your water is not flat (it’s not as deep as it should be over the toilet, for instance, which you can see through the tangent of the water level and the top of the cistern), and this impression is heightened through the perspective of the tea tray. It’s not the end of the world if the perspective is not flawless, but I think a few minor adjustments would stop it taking away from your piece.I hope this makes sense, keep us posted on the progress!
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Here's the updated sketch. The books need to be fixed what else? -
@ksfabian I feel like your second drawing is super close besides the angle of the shelves. I used the water tank to establish vanishing points and did a super quick sketch to see. I also feel the placement of the mermaid within the tub is good in the second drawing too. Constructing the duck, Lilly pads, and tea set within cubes will help sort out proper ellipses and placement I think.
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I think your second version is nearly perfect!! I love the duck teasing the cat -- more than water for that cat to worry about...
Really heightens the contrast between the cat's stress and everyone else's peacefullness.I like the lily pads -- for some reason I want more of them around the left edge, but that's just me.
The Tray and Tea Set DO bother me. If I were in this tub, I'd place the tray with the long edge facing me (horizontal to the picture frame). Then I'd have the teacup and it's handle close to my right hand (I'm right handed). I'd have the cookies close to me (maybe on the opposite side of the tray from the cup, then the Pot farther from me in the middle. Arranging it this way is "logical" to me, and it just might solve some tangency vs scattered concerns.
Looking forward to more of this one!