WIP Lucky? Story question
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@joosterwijk "who is the lucky one?" Is exactly what I thought when I looked at it so it works for that
Nicola Schofield
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@joosterwijk Oo! I love this! It tells two separate stories and I'm invested. I feel like the only thing I would suggest you play around with is the way your use of value is leading the story. When I look at the picture as a whole, I notice the cat first every time because of how dark it is and then look up to see what the cat is looking at. I think it you made the cat blend into the background, you'd see the bird and his open cage first and think "Yay! He's free! Oh wait.." Which might be the emotional arc you're wanting to take us on? Can't wait to see this finished!
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@joosterwijk not too complicated at all, I think it’s a great concept!
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Not complicated! This is great very interesting turn of events! Great job
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Oh I love this! I love that it has so many layers to the story and the eye is pulled from the cat to the bird.
I do agree that if the cat were lighter in value than the bird, you’d see him second and get the uhoh of the story more clearly. Maybe a blonde/golden cat and a yellow canary?
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I like the unknown element…if there was a moment of eye contact between the bird and cat it would add to the tension. I also like how the other birds are watching like the viewer…
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@joosterwijk hehe
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@joosterwijk I think the deeper the storytelling the better as long as it is readable to your target audience. And I think this one is really well done!
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It's very clear and makes me wonder what will come next. Love the 3 birds smooched together in obvious curiosity knowing the cat is there. I say go for it!
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@NicolaSchofield @Griffin @Asyas_illos @Nyrryl-Cadiz @Holumpa @KatrinaF Thank you all! It is good to know it does not only work in my head. Thanks!
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@Catherine Thanks! That is a good idea. The main focus is now indeed on the cat, but the other way around is better!
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@AngelinaKizz Thanks Angelina, I’m going to play around with the colours, see if I can make it work.
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@joosterwijk I came back for more! this composition is just so good! My eyes actually go to the bird first because all those birdcages, it’s really striking to me. But it’s also great how you have the contrast between the cat and its background. Really love this piece!
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@ThomCharles Thanks! In my first sketches I had them looking at each other, but I couldn’t get the birds yes-I-am-free feeling enough. I also now miss the tension, thanks for pointing it out, I’ll try to get it back
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@Asyas_illos Thanks Asya! I will try not to screw it up
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@joosterwijk I love that the bird is obliviously happy. He's just there thinking, Yes! I'm the luckiest bird in the world!
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I'm a little late to the party, but wanted to chime in and say that I love the concept and got it right away! I think you should definitely go with it.
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Concept read very well and love all those super cute Birdies!
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@joosterwijk The concept is clear in that luck is relative and fleeting. Right now, my eye bounces back and forth between the cat to the main bird. I would suggest when you try to make one of them clearly the main focus by adjusting value and your choice of color.
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Thanks again everyone! This is what I made of it. Not much has changed, I tried looking at each other but I like this one better.
