'Cats Want In' critique
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Hi folks,
I'd be really grateful if you could give me some feedback on the attached.Got to the point where I've been looking at it so long I can't decide what to think of it. So some fresh eyes and clear words would be very much appreciated.
Thanks very much indeed!
Adam
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I love the POV and the composition! Obviously you really thought through the perspective as well. At this point I might try some sunlight overlays that would add atmosphere and soften the geometric effects some,* since the eye goes first to the area of greatest contrast, i.e., the geometric patterns and the bright white sidelight. While the geometric areas really establish the perspective, they and the sidelight are attracting more attention than either the mouse or the cats. I'd have the outside be the brightest thing so that we notice the cats first, since they are the most important part of the story.
Also, if the mottled effect is sunlight, it needs a little modification so that it will lay flat on the ground. At first I thought maybe it could be paw prints, which would be hilarious, but the cats can't quite get that high on the glass.
I saw the first cat, but it took a minute to find the second, lower one. (Ha, he can't quite reach!) Then I saw the mouse and laughed. Then looking at the lion, I'm thinking maybe the mouse locked them out of their own house? I think you've got a good idea here, did a lot of good work towards setting it up, and with just a little attention shifting to accentuate the story you will have a really nice piece.
That's my quick take, anyway. Let's see what someone else has to say!
*If you have a subscription, there is a Pascal Campion Jump Into the Studio session that demonstrates how to do this.
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@LauraA Laura, that's gold! Thanks so very much for your comments. I am sincerely grateful to you. Yes, the focal points are all over the place, aren't they! I'm not sure what you meant by sunlight overlays, but I'll have a look at the Pascal Jump session now. I'll get to work with all of your suggestions.
Thanks again for your time and help.
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@Adam-Thornton-0 I'm really just repeating what I have heard in so many SVS critiques: Everything goes towards the focus, which tells the story. But I hope you can find that Jump session, because it really is handy!
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Great start on comp and POV as Laura said! One thing I thought to note was the inconsistency directly center stage on the piece was sucking up all my attention. The tiles seem to be lining up everywhere except right where the light is leading the viewer's attention and I felt like all the momentum got lost where the shadows and the tiles don't line up with what is around them.
