Critique on interior
Griffin last edited by
@Melissa-Bailey-0 all great feedback! Helps so much to get other’s perspectives, thanks so much!
@Griffin For me the floor/ceiling are so similar to the walls that it almost feels like they are one continual thing. Could you darken the line work between the floor and wall and also the ceiling and wall? Or maybe change the color or brightness of the floor and ceiling to be different from the wall? Maybe more of an almond color or add just a hint of red? This is fun to see. Good job, even if you're not quite happy with it yet.
Melissa Bailey 0 last edited by
@Griffin you're so welcome! Looking forward to seeing what you do with this piece!
The perspective on the left side - the shelves and dishes especially, is a tad off. The third beam on the left side needs to be removed. It's clumsy, arguing with the top of the shelves. It's also structurally unsound as that beam would likely be in the top of the wall - also too close to the chimney pipe. Most chimney pipes bend to go through a wall not a ceiling. Embed it in the top of the wall if you want to keep it. Then give the chimney pipe a clean line through the ceiling. It will look better.
Move the canter beam a tad to the left. This will give the lantern a better vertical line to the floor too.
Lose the table between the shelves and stove. It's bridging he space between the two. You could put something smaller there.
Put more detail in the rug as it in in the foreground - looks too flat.
Distinguish the value or color between the walls and ceiling. You can use the light and shadows cast by the lantern to do this.
The glasses on the table look unfinished. Glass will bend light and change the look of things seen through it. A tiny detail that can make a big difference. Ceramic or tin cups might be more appropriate for the story.
Log ends are too bright - ad wood grain and tone them down so they stay in the background whee they belong.
Hope this helps.
Chimney pipe could be bent up like they needed to use whatever pipe they could find instead of looking new,
Clarify - embed the beam in the top of the wall
@Griffin Looks Great! My first thought for feedback is maybe to look at Albert Hurter or the Brothers Hildebrant for warm and inviting interior fairytale spaces. I thinking making warm and cool areas might really liven up the room. You can fake the light sources for effect...maybe the stove is leaking light? Maybe the lamp is throwing an impossible amount of warm light (which seems to be a pretty standard trick) Maybe textured brush and a more varied plank width on the floor walls and ceiling? On can imaging the timbers were hewn by hand so maybe some of them would be massive or have a bit of a live edge here and there? I hope you will forgive the super quick paint over ...was thinking i would splash some warms and cools about to maybe show what i was thinking.
Heather Boyd last edited by
@Griffin I'd say a focal point that tells a story. Whether it's the kettle boiling -someone's got to get to it before...or put something delicious in that bowl (with a pop of colour to say look here first). It's very homey which is inviting but needs a little more go here first and then look here.
Hope that helps,
@Griffin HI! Great work as usual! However, in terms of narrative, I think this house looks too pristine. I think we should keep in mind that Hansel and Gretel's family is so destitute that the parents are willing to leave their kids in the woods to die. However, this family still has china? I'd imagine that's the first to go when times get tough. I personally think you can still add more character to this house. Make it more dilapidated and wrecked. Maybe also add a cool hue to the room in order to have a cold and unwelcoming feeling. I hope this was helpful.
The main thing that sticks out to me is similar to what Kevin said. Warm and cool areas, lit and less lit areas, lively and stagnant areas or something along those lines would help to create more contrast in the room which I think would add a lot more depth and space. This is the biggest thing that popped out to me. Since most of the piece is brownish I have a hard time feeling the depth even though your perspective looks quite good.