Super fun concept (I love steampunk-y dirigibles, I have one in my portfolio too and it looks like you already have some great feedback. These forums are a great place for getting critiques, and its especially awesome when one of the instructors drops in lucky you! My only comment is your linework seems a little big inconsistent to me--its definitely all there on your dirigible and the dad and the house, but in places like the backpack and the bushes it looks more rendered. Variation in line work can be OK as long as there is some consistency and rhyme and reason to why things are different, which I'm not seeing in the way you have it right now.

http://forum.svslearn.com/topic/2409/round-2-sept-3thurs New concept, @Lee-White

@drawingmelee Thank you!

@Kevin-Longueil thanks, I fixed that , and submitted my first entry. fingers crossed!

@Jana Thank you Jana. Yes the blockey style is something that I do. I will take this into Photoshop and test what happens when I switch the direction. Thank you for the perspective on the leg as well. I was hoping that it read with a bit of squash and stretch... but maybe it doesn't. Thank you I will check on this and re-post.

Capon Crusader is the only Cockeral that doesn't care for Cackling Cornish Crooks. Please give input for this. I wanted critiques before I colored it. Thanks, Chris

@Lynn-Larson Thank Lynn. That tree was a lot of fun! I don't have my technique down yet so I wasn't too confident when I started rendering it. But with some play and trying different brushes it came out well. Last submission here, I promise... I think, hehheh. I submitted my illustration last night and became restless thinking of all the details that would help push the image. I added some falling leaves to the tree, some sparkles and an abstract tool to the toolbox. I am much happier with the results now. Thank you all for the kind words and comments! Happy 3rd Thursday.

@evilrobot Thanks for bring that up. I was unsure too, if the conveyor belt is a tool or not, as it is described in the text? In the first one she is holding the box and the belt with the bottles are flying out. Maybe if she was reaching in and yanking it out. Unsure if that would be confusing or not? Thanks for your input.

I think it's a really cool drawing and I like the idea of an elephant...I'm not getting that she's bringing it to show and tell though...To me I think there is just something really funny about bringing the elephant into the class room. You could even give the elephant some character like perhaps the elephant is scared to be in front of crowds...what would an elephant afraid of crowds look like standing in front of a crowd of children? How does the teacher react to the elephant in the room is he or she amazed, horrified, or just trying to protect their peanut butter sandwich from the hungry elephant's trunk. Again I think it's a wonderful idea but you're missing some amazing story telling opportunities.

Great illustration! I especially like how you have stacked the light and dark values so that what's important really sticks out (the bright green frog against the blackboard, for example)! The image reads great, which is not easy!

I like your characters, really expressive Agree with the others about the arm/handsize that's big compared to the rest of their bodies - will you be finishing this even though you won't be submitting it to the Third Thursday?

@Rich-Green Happy to hear it! I obviously am a dog lover, I have a black and chocolate lab and my in laws lab is visiting so I have three underfoot at the moment.

@mattramsey thank you. Just out of art school so I am trying to find my natural style instead of assignment driven work.

@Dulcie a second piece!! i think I will, but maybe not for 3rd Thursday. Took some pictures of a toy train at work, I think I'll use that as reference. thanks for the encouragement.

I realy like the idea, and the perspective on this piece. Still needs a lot of rendering and the values and the color are not that strong at this moment. You have to chek the hands and the face on the yeti, give hem a surprised look , use some ref pics. But i believe, if this piece is rendered out strong and correct, that this could be a winning piece, please use reference pics and make your own reference pics on light and shadow. Good luck on this piece, overall i love this one!!

Love the color scheme. the green is lovely.