Isolation Landscape WIP - critiques welcome
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@carlianne here are the updates.
I wanted to go with the story of how much mail means when you live an isolated life. I think all of us are experiencing that right now. But when the prairie lands were settled mail and news were a huge deal as well.
Anyway, let me know if you are getting more story?
I was thinking about if there should be a shadow under the prairie girl. I could be easily swayed.
The kid in the mountain piece will probably be a little girl with a dress as well, it was just too small yet to get that in.
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@theprairiefox I like 5B!
I wonder what would happen in 5B if you turned the mailman around so he’s facing towards the viewer? Right now it looks like he’s headed toward the house, but the girl running for the mailbox seems to imply that he’s already dropped off the mail (at least to me!)
If you go for 5a, I’m definitely missing the shadow under the little girl! Especially since the mailman has one, it makes her feel like she’s floating in space.
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@korilynneillo good idea! I will play with turning him around.
He could then be looking at the girl as well moving the reader in a better triangular motion.
I will definitely play with the shadow.
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Hi, I really love the style of your work, its very emotive, feels somewhat Scandinavian for some reason, like the moomins! The only criticism I have, if you could call it that, is that rather that having a plait,( Plaid, plat?, the haircut girls have, you know what I mean!) it almost looks like the girl has two heads. I know its a minor thing, and it may be stylistic choice, Or she has a head like 'Hey Arnold' but its such a lovely image, and that was the only constructive thing I can offer!
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@gavpartridge I am working on establishing a base style for my characters. I am glad you are liking them.
Thanks for the advice on the hair it looks much better. I haven't done the detail on the characters yet. The whole picture is still only 7 inches wide (and I work traditionally).
I will definitely clean that up on the next revision when I get it to full size.
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@theprairiefox 2B reads as a story to me! But I actually thought it was a dad coming home it something, kinda reminded me of dads coming home from war.
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@theprairiefox Cool! I've also been considering doing paper cutouts + watercolor this month (currently I have a watercolor background with a digital character on top, but I've been considering changing the digital character to a paper cutout). One thing to consider might be scanning the paper cutout pieces separately and then compositing them digitally? I think a key thing with cutouts that can give them some depth is the little shadows where they overlap, and creating these digitally made give a little more control? It's definitely possible to do that with photography but it seems tricky.
Ps, if you haven't seen his work before, I recommend the books of David Wisniewski, who made children's books with amazing paper cutouts. Might give some inspiration. Here's a so-so photo of one of his books:
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@Braxton very cool. I will definitely check David Wisniewski out.
I connected with Kelsey Sheldon who does some very cool paper cut work both illustration and animation. She had some great advice and she is mixing watercolor and papercut as well.
She suggested:
double sided, sticky foam spacers are really helpful for adding dimension- like you said about your own piece, that dimension can be really lovely! This is a way to add it while keeping everything secure, and it gives you more control over where the spacing is. I usually use these in combination with rubber cement.
Another illustrator you might want to look at is Camille Garoche she has done a couple of wordless books using papercut and watercolor. She actually mounts her paper cuts in a box with space in between to give that depth as well.
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Okay, here is the first version with everything. Questions abound, would love to hear your thoughts.
- Do the mountains have TOO much contrast? Are they distracting?
- Does the color of the girl work? Should she be redder and less orange?
- Does the person walking convey mailman? I made him slightly blue and added a hat and letter.
- Does the border work? I thought it added some professionalism... I might be crazy though.
Thanks for the input.
Note I will retake the photo playing with lighting as well.
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@theprairiefox It's really well done. The only thing I think is a little distracting is the white unpainted parts of the background.
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@theprairiefox This is really interesting! The mountains are a bit distracting. I am wondering if the mountains could have an additional blue wash over them in the same tint as the mailman? That would bring in that color more and might make the mountains more subtle too.
Very fun to experiment with!
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@theprairiefox I love the textures and the variation of the color. Love it!
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@theprairiefox looking good! To me the first one (with the little girl small) fits the prompt better, as her scale and distance from the viewer makes her feel more isolated. I do like the greater degree of contrast in the second image though.
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I think the second is a better image, but the first fits the prompt better. I agree that the mountains are too busy - the postman is also getting lost a little bit, it took me a second to find him. What if you made the postman a similar color to the little girl?
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Okay, I cleaned up the mountains. Did a little repositioning. Straightened the house in the prairie scene. And retook the pictures for each.
These are final...
Let me know which you think is better for the contest this month. I am having a hard time deciding. I will post it up to the main thread tomorrow.
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I would go with the prairie scene for the contest, currently it's more striking because of the values and color combo and out of the two it feels more like "isolation"- though that could be a subjective read on my part. The mountain scene, I love it overall, but I think it is too contrasted in the textures of the mountains and therefore not quite as striking.
That being said, this technique is gorgeous. I'd love to see more of this from you.