The first thing that jumps out at me is the outlines. You should get rid of them. Draw in tones, values. Put in the black shapes around the hands, the mid tones, the highlights, but don't draw lines, just shapes. Nothing in nature has outlines. Also, these appear to be a little rushed. Take your time, really study what you're looking at, double check proportions, negative space etc. A classic read is 'Drawing on the right side of the brain'. If you go through that, takes about a month or so, that would improve your basic technique no end, then drawing everything will be ten times easier.

Thought i'd put this up, I'm much happier with it now, albeit 'finished not perfect' as Jake says! If anyone is interested, In the end I simply shifted the hue of the greyscale towards blue then painted a bit of yellow on here and there, bit of rendering and texture etc. Couldn't work out another way to make it look decent. I'm only just starting to work with colour, having just drawn in pencil pretty much my whole life. Is this monochromatic then? If anyone else has advice on painting colours at night please let me know, Like, how does grass look under a blue moonlight? Just blue right?? I'm rambling now, this stuff melts my brain.

Yeah that works mate, really nice! Shows what i know! Lol.

Love this piece. It looks like the shadows are a bit inconsistent though, like on the people, and the house, the light is on the right as we look at it, with shadows going left, but on the nest, the left side of the nest casts no shadow. The beak does a bit, but a nest that size would cast a big shadow, probably covering the left window. The back bird would probably be in shadow too. Small fix though, and may help the birds 'pop' a bit.

I love the drawing, absolute quality. The only distraction for me is the castle in the background being so dark it draws my eye from the characters. If that was a lot lighter, with less contrast, the forground would stick out more.

Found a bit on photographing work here: (hope this works.)

https://forum.svslearn.com/topic/6717/preparing-your-art-files-for-print-and-for-professional-clients

Right, so i've come up with this. Its not exactly as I had it in my head, obviously I could sit and render it till the cows come home, but if anyone's got any thoughts at this stage, they would be very useful and appreciated! I think the washed out comment mentioned above has happened, shame I didn't see that comment till just now! lol. Learnt soooo much from doing this piece, mainly to not watch so many tutorials, turns out it doesn't stick in your head unless your applying it at the same time! Least with me anyway.

First of all can i thank you for all for the considered and informative responses. This is my first post on this forum and i can already see what an incredible resource it is. I dread to think how much time i wasted making the same mistakes over and over again without getting any decent feedback.

So, yeah, i was sort of aware of that tangent but in my naivety i though the tiny gap would solve it. I think ill move the gargoyle away from the house, got scope to do that. And ill adust the values to seperate the trees a bit more, its all pretty close.

I rewatched that 10 steps... by Will Terry. That blokes a genius. Took him about 20 mins to get to where i am now after about twelve hours. Made me realise ive spent waaaay too much time rendering the greyscale, i should just have got a polished lineart sketch and then quickly brushed in the shadows and tone. Its exposed my lack of knowledge about layer modes. All my rendering time should have been done in cokour. My crappy bamboo tablet doesnt help though, even Will admits that!

Learnt a lot from one simple forum post, amazing really! Cheers all!