...though in case it's helpful, the first thing I notice when I look at the piece is the fire.Thank you for sharing! I've enjoyed watching this develop and have learned from your process.
@lisanganart Good start. I like the characters and concept you are going for. Here are a few points.
Having the pig hold 2 marshmallows is very distracting. I keep looking for a third person.
I would agree with @KathrynAdebayo that the first focal point is the fire. I would say the scarf is a ways down the focal point list. If you hadn't pointed it out I might not have even noticed it.
I agree also that adding shadows would do a lot for it as well.
Just my 2 cents... take it for what is worth.
They are really cute and do seem to be telling a story about friendship both being wrapped up in the scarf and sharing a special fireside moment.
I think they are fairly well lit but I would change the tone that lights them both up to reflect the close proximity of the fire, make it a little more golden yellow and a bit brighter on their faces.
The shadows on their sides of their faces are quite strong so a brighter light source would reflect that more accurately.
I would also lighten the snow around the fire as well making it a bit brighter with a shadowed ring directly beneath the fire on the snow and the ring of light around the fire stretching a little further out and more evenly.
The shadows behind them should be a little stronger but not too much and should stretch behind them a bit.
Add a little bit of color on that snowy branch too, just a little at the tips that are closest to the fire. The snow is so white that it will reflect the yellowish light of the fire and this will add a more polished and natural look to it.
The bottom right corner of the house should be brought down a bit while the bottom left corner is raised a little.
The angle of the bottom of the house is a little too sharp and it appears as if it is stretching into the air a little too much.
The angle of the image looking down from above to the characters below would have the house on a more even level with the ground that the characters are sitting on just like the log is more level.
You may also want to make the door a little bit smaller to compensate for the fact that when you bring the bottom left corner of the house up a bit you are losing a bit of the door in its current size and position.
Making it a little bit smaller will help keep more of the door in the frame.
Everything else looks really good.
One more thing, I didn't really mention the background much at all.
There is a stand of trees in front of the moon, the top of the snow on the tree disappears against the moonlight.
Here is a photo of the trees directly in front of the moon illustrating that the shadows should be stretching directly forward towards the foreground but not completely into the foreground as they are in this image. Keep proximity in mind here.
The tops of the trees as you have in your image would tend to blend into the moonlight a little bit as the snow is the same color value as the moonlight but if you make the most forward-facing part of the trees that are closest to the foreground a little bit darker with the left and right sides of each tree being lighter to reflect the moonlight and brightest at the top it will give your background a little more dimension.
Such a cute concept! I love the kinship you created between the bunny and the pig.
(1) Color: is everything working well together or not? If not, which color is not working? Do you think the characters are too dark and should be brighter?!
Would it be possible to cool down the color of the fire and do something a bit cooler? I couldn't find a perfect example but something like this?
I think making the fire a bit cooler would bring out the red in the scarf a bit more...
(2) Am I communicating that the scarf as the focal point? It is the object that threads through the story.
(3) Do you feel whether anything is distracting and should be removed or replaced or resized?
There are a lot of marshmallows in the fire. Perhaps you could have the animals sharing a single marshmallow and that could also help to emphasize the scarf?
(4) Anything that looks odd or out of place? Or out of proportion? (Besides the window; I will fix that)
The house adjacent to the fire seems a bit askew from the fire/animals. Perhaps it could be brought into the background a bit more and the perspective changed a bit so it doesn't seem at quite an angle. It may be possible that the house in the foreground is not needed with the one in the background?
(5) Composition: Any suggestions for improvement?
Overall, a nice piece! I hope my comments are helpful. I'm a newbie so please take with a grain of salt.
@jennymwine @Ben-Migliore @KathrynAdebayo @theprairiefox @Jessica-Jolicoeur @djly Thank you all so much for stopping by to post your suggestions for improvement. I will take everything to heart and work hard at all the weaknesses that you pointed out. I really appreciate your time and help!
@lisanganart Hi! You have great concept going on here. Your characters are cute. However, I think we can still improve the piece more. Here are the issues i’m seeing.
The bonfire. I personally think that your bonfire is too huge for roasting marshmallows. I’d reckon it would burn your smores in a few seconds. Also, your fire is too red. I’m not an expert on fire but flames made by coal/wood/fuel most of the time look more orangy/yellowish than red. I’d suggest toning it down and making it more orange/yellow. I also undrstand that you want to focuse the attention more on the scarf warped around our characters but since both the scarf and the flame are both red, they’re kinda fighting for the attention. And since the flames are more saturated that the scarf, they’re kinda winning and your scarf get thrown in the backdrop. I honestly did not notice the scarf thing until you mentioned it.
The pig’s marshmallows. I really think that your pig having 2 marshmallows is just too excessive. I understand that it might be a part of your story like if the pig had this really big appetite but it just makes the area between the pig and cat(?) too busy. Your piece would really benefit if you get rid of that extra marshmallow and make it more simple.
The Perspective. Now this is a huge glaring issue for me. Your characters and the background seem to have a unified perspective but the house and your bonfire seem to be doing their own thing. Let’s first talk about the bonfire. Your camera angle is set at a higher angle that means we should be getting more of a top view and seeing the circumference of the stones around the flames but you’ve painted the fire pit as if we’re directly viewing it from the side. We need to fix this. Now let’s go to the bigger issue, the house. You’re house seems like we’re viewing it from a bird’s eye view. It’s so foreshortened. It really contradicts the whole piece.
Below is my paint over of your piece. We need to fix a few things but your piece has big potential. I hope this helps.
Wow, nice paintover, Nyrryl! @nyrrylcadiz As a word of encouragement to @lisanganart , I don't think Nyrryl could have done that without such a good foundation to work on. Thanks for sharing your art for everyone to learn from!
@KathrynAdebayo the piece definitely had great bones. Great concept. Good composition. 
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@nyrrylcadiz Thank you so much for taking the time to explain everything to me and also to do a paint over. It looks so much better! @KathrynAdebayo thank you for your encouragement! Thank you everyone for stopping by. I learned so much from all of you and I appreciate the honesty and eagerness to help. You are an amazing group!
@lisanganart you’re doing amazing work! Keep on practicing and making art and yuo’ll surely improve. 
@lisanganart Very cute concept.
@nyrrylcadiz Wow. the paint over is great. Love the lighting in your paint over.
Your paint over was also helpful to me as well, thanks @nyrrylcadiz
Great paint over, @nyrrylcadiz!
That is exactly what I was thinking and suggesting in my comment.
It looks great.
Wow, nice paintover, Nyrryl! @nyrrylcadiz As a word of encouragement to @lisanganart , I don't think Nyrryl could have done that without such a good foundation to work on. Thanks for sharing your art for everyone to learn from!
