Rabbit Road Race - composition OK?

[jenn]

Hi fellow Rabbits,
I know this is SO last minute. If you have 48 seconds to throw an opinion my way, I would be grateful. Is there anything super annoying about this composition? Does it make only 55% sense? Can you even tell what is going on? Feel free to point it out. Thank you very much in advance.

[KevinTreaccar]

@jenn This reminds me of Cool Runnings and it looks to me like the fourth/back bunny is falling off or struggling to jump onto the bobsled.

[jenn]

@KevinTreaccar yay, you got it, thanks!

[Asyas_illos]

@jenn feel the rhythm, feel the rhyme, look out Jamaica it’s bobsled time! This is looking great!

[lucy_gow]

@jenn I think it's lovely! I like all the curves. Perhaps the horizontal line in front of the mountains bothers me a little though – it could be less straight - maybe like a flattish U-shape? That's just my sense though, it's not well-founded in any experience of bobsledding down mountains.

[jenn]

@Asyas_illos thanks

[jenn]

@lucy_gow thank you so much

[PenAndrew]

@jenn A good composition, I would make the central figures and car larger to add impact.

[jenn]

@PenAndrew ok thanks very much

[kirsten-mcg]

This is so much fun! He's falling/being blow off the end of the bobsled, right? I think your composition is working well. I like how the mountains and stream in the background are mimicking the curve of the track. I also think it has a good sense of movement to it. Keep going!

[jenn]

Thank you for helping me with the composition, friends. I didn't quite finish but I'm just going to submit it anyway for my own sense of closure. I can already see so many things wrong with it. I will revisit later.

[Asyas_illos]

@jenn I really like it, great colors!