@Kara_Bazley One thing I noticed is the direction of the rain makes me feel like this storm isn't a threat that is coming, but one that passed and is blowing away but the people didn't experience it (not soaking wet), and they won't experience it.They are just looking at it from a distance. Like what @Lee-White said about the distance. I do like the idea of it though. If you are out hiking and you see a storm rolling in... Maybe you could create a feeling of urgency by a character seeking shelter, putting on more layers like a rain coat, or really not being prepared and getting stuck in the rain with no coat? Anyway, I enjoy looking at your work! I like the second one out of the two best.