WIP - Bongo & Clyde - Feedback Wanted

  • @dickdavid thanks for the detailed feedback!

    I did not go to this level yet with the text as I was just testing it out. I will definitely pay close attention as I place the actual text over the final illustration. It is great to get the pointers!

  • @theprairiefox forgive me if I went to far in the weeds with that. I hope I didn’t get to prescriptive with my comments. I don’t usually say much, but when I do, sometimes I can’t turn it off. Hahaha.

    I’m looking forward to seeing the final spread.

  • @dickdavid it was great insights. Thanks for the comments. Definitely NOT too much. I love feedback and it always improves my pieces.

  • Okay, I finally got to finish cutting all of the pieces! Was down to my last color when I had to run off.

    Here is what it looks like in cut paper.

    Please let me know your thoughts or any improvements that could be made. It is NOT glued down 100% (some small pieces are glued so I could get it laid out). So changes are definitely an option.

    I have some different shades of each of the colors if you think there is a problem.

    I will probably glue everything down tomorrow once I have feedback and then move on to putting the text on the image.

    I can re-cut anything so don't hold back on feedback because you think it might be too much work.

    Photo Jun 28, 4 35 22 PM copy.jpg

  • I think this is my final. @carolinebautista, @dickdavid, @Johanna-Kim let me know if you see anything I should change before submitting tomorrow!


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    @theprairiefox Wow, this turned out so beautiful. I love the paper texture and overall look. Not sure if you submitted already, but if you did, it's fantastic. If you still want some feedback, and it's just a personal preference thing I think, I'd prefer that Bongo's gaze lead to the Clyde (i.e., slide the the right). My gaze goes straight to his eyes, which feel like they're moving off to the left when what you really want is to move to the right and then circle back and around. Otherwise, love this. Great job!

  • I love the final piece. The paper craft technique is great and the type looks much better.

  • @Johanna-Kim I have not submitted yet. I can still play with it. I was waiting for any final feedback.

    I see what you are saying about Bongo's eye. I will see what I can do. I think I can just remake a couple of pieces to try.

    Thanks again for all the feedback.

  • @theprairiefox I'm so glad @Johanna-Kim pointed out the eye! It's good for me to notice what I didn't notice. I thought Bongo was looking at the viewer but now I can't unsee him looking to the side.

    The piece looks great. It seems like the subject matter and the textured paper were a perfect match.

  • @Johanna-Kim & @carolinebautista I was able to fix the eye in photoshop!

    I also fixed in on the paper version but Photoshop saved me having to redo everything through the process.

    I hope you like it! I am posting it now...


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