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    • phoenix yip
      phoenix yip @braydin hawlette last edited by

      @Braden-Hallett What do you think about the style, and rendering. Or my focal points and composition? Thanks!

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      • phoenix yip
        phoenix yip last edited by

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        I worked on it a little more, what do you think?

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        • ArtofAleksey
          ArtofAleksey @phoenix yip last edited by

          @phoenix-yip the dark areas in the image create large dark masses that pull away from the little vehicle the light is shining on.

          instagram and twitter: @artofaleksey
          alekseyillustration.com

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          • phoenix yip
            phoenix yip @ArtofAleksey last edited by

            @Aleksey Oh ok, do you mean the very foreground?

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            • ArtofAleksey
              ArtofAleksey @phoenix yip last edited by

              @phoenix-yip several places. The foreground, the trees that have the light beam passing behind them (the dark in front of the light creates several spots of contrast that are almost as high as the the ship) and also the 2 big trees in the middle create kind of big triangle thats pointing up, as well as a few other trees creating those Xs and triangles that are kind of averting my eye away from that little ship and towards the top of the image.

              instagram and twitter: @artofaleksey
              alekseyillustration.com

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              • phoenix yip
                phoenix yip @ArtofAleksey last edited by

                @Aleksey Oh I see, I'll try to fix that. Thanks a lot!

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                • braydin hawlette
                  braydin hawlette @phoenix yip last edited by

                  @phoenix-yip My biggest peeve is that the branch in the lower left foreground is creating enough of a tangent with the vehicle to be confusing. At first read it seems like it could be a flower, or mushroom instead of a vehicle.

                  I'd also make those engines nice and glowy 🙂

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                  • chrisaakins
                    chrisaakins last edited by

                    @phoenix-yip I like your setting very much. The forest looks immense and deep and dark. I am instantly drawn in. However, I confess that I had a hard time reading what the spaceship was at first. I thought it was a bleeding rat head??? I had to read the comments to figure it out. I think that it could stand to be a little larger and a little more defined to be more readable as a speeder. I also agree with @Braden-Hallett about the "glowy" lights. (Braden, is that really a word?)

                    Keep it up. It is a nice composition.

                    Chris Akins
                    www.chrisakinsart.com
                    www.instagram.com/chrisakinsart/

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                    • phoenix yip
                      phoenix yip @braydin hawlette last edited by

                      @Braden-Hallett Thank you very much, I was trying to create an implied line with the branch, but i think youre right, it is a tangent. I will also work on the engine more. Thank you!

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                      • phoenix yip
                        phoenix yip @chrisaakins last edited by

                        @chrisaakins I agree, Thank you, this helps a lot!

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